The editor's argument in Batavia newspaper is so well articulated and substantiated so as to make someone corroborate with the idea at first glance. The numbers and figures provided in the argument by the editor are a sweet trap for those who don't logically reason through the assumptions made by the author. Lucid answers to the following assumptions will help us understand if the desired recommendation will have the predicted results.
First and foremost, the author informs us that the number of diary farms in the country have increased by 25%. While the development may be good news for Batavia's milk supply but it fails to adequately answer the question if the amount of milk produced is able to satiate the demand of milk in the market. In a free economy, the demand and supply play a vital role in determining prices and if the demand is too high and the so called increase in the number of farms is unable to increase the supply to such a level to as to be surplus, the price of milk will naturally increase. The author should provide more data about the number of litres of consumption per person in Batavia against the number of litres produced per diary farm and other such supporting data.
Adding to the above, the author does not give an account of population growth in Batavia. Was the growth rate faster than the rate at which the diary farm and its milk production increased? Well if that was the case then the demand and supply ratio will be really skewed and it will effectively help in evaluation of the recommendation.
Secondly, the author provides us another premise that the increase in milk price has been very steep in the same period by providing data from a local food market. This doubling of milk price seems to be meteoric and one might immediately conclude that the author's recommendation is the only hope. The author fails to elucidate whether the price rise is abrupt or based or various other factors that determine the pricing of the product. In the span of 10 years, the price animals, raw materials such as hay, farm maintenance, transportation etc. that is linked to milk production would have increased because of inflation and the price of milk might only factor these in.
Finally, the author assumes that the farmers are receiving excessive profit and that a price regulation will put this to check. The farmers might have been receiving enormous amounts of profits, however without actual evidence, it is difficult to corroborate with such a claim. Profits are a relative term and though the selling price of the product at retail stores might have increased, we have no evidence whatsoever to prove that it translates into increased profits for the farmers. There could simply be an addition of middlemen who might be taking up a significant chunk of profits for themselves as from the argument we cannot make out if the farmers are directly selling at retail outlets.
In order to conclude, if the author provides answers or evidences for the above questions then it will be easier to evaluate the effectiveness of the recommendation provided by the author. A price regulation itself could bring along the devils associated with it where the farmers regulate the price by glutting milk supply or artificially creating scarcity for it but that is a discussion for another day. Therefore, to summarize, the author's assumption that a price regulation on retail milk prices will ensure fair price to consumers, while sounding effective, may actually be futile and unwanted and the author should support his recommendation with sufficient relevant data.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'editors'' or 'editor's'?
Suggestion: editors'; editor's
The editors argument in Batavia newspaper is so wel...
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Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...s so well articulated and substantiated so as to make someone corroborate with the idea ...
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Line 1, column 106, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'corroborates'.
Suggestion: corroborates
...and substantiated so as to make someone corroborate with the idea at first glance. The numb...
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Line 1, column 243, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e editor are a sweet trap for those who dont logically reason through the assumption...
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Line 7, column 258, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...one might immediately conclude that the authors recommendation is the only hope. The au...
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Line 11, column 437, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...other day. Therefore, to summarize, the authors assumption that a price regulation on r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 11.1786427146 197% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 55.5748502994 146% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3002.0 2260.96107784 133% => OK
No of words: 610.0 441.139720559 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92131147541 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96972615649 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71015687409 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 204.123752495 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46393442623 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 951.3 705.55239521 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8964216409 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.454545455 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7272727273 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.59090909091 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.20758483034 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0800747727067 0.218282227539 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0304057547284 0.0743258471296 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0319220193075 0.0701772020484 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0503664689444 0.128457276422 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039382227957 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 98.500998004 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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