Arts and Military go a long way in defining the country's culture and strength. They are the two of the most crucial pillar of the foundation of a country. The recommendation provided for investing equal amounts in arts and military is too generalized and there are various factors that one should consider and analyze.
Firstly, Arts play a defining role in society. For example, Italy - the home of Renaissance, the paintings and culture define the aura and atmosphere of the country. Every ruler or person of significance commissioned paintings for which an amount commensurate to their rank was sanctioned. The result is evident in the form of beautiful cities that include Rome, Venice and many others. The sculptures of Leonardo da Vinci and paintings of Picasso are awe-inspiring. While the point of discussion is the vital role of arts, there is no strong evidence even in Olden Italy to suggest that higher investment or an investment equal to military is required. It may not be necessary that such huge investments like that required for military is essential for arts.
Military is essential to create a powerful image of a country. This in turn leads to intimidating any potential future invaders. A strong military means huge investment. These investments are required for research and buying defense equipments which often cost billions of dollar and are significant proportion of a country's GDP. India, which is one of the largest buyers of defense equipment, spends greater than 10% of its GDP on military and defense but is culturally very rich without having similar amounts of investment in arts. Moreover, if a country is not strong enough then any amounts of investment in arts will not help shape the society as the country would be susceptible to invaders who could plunder through troves of Architectural marvels. This is evident from Iraq and Afghanistan where beautiful sculptures of ancient times were blatantly destroyed by the fanatics.
It is very important to note here that only a country that is stable can afford to invest equal amounts in arts and military. An unstable country will have to keep increasing its military budget thereby severely circumscribing the amount that can be spent on other things including arts.
To conclude, it depends on the state of the country and also the affordability for a country to follow the recommendation provided as investments depend on various external factors and this cannot be taken as a general recommendation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 148, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'mean'?
Suggestion: mean
...tial future invaders. A strong military means huge investment. These investments are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, then, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2094.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 408.0 442.535393258 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13235294118 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93713156491 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5944122684 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.7 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122339400667 0.243740707755 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0367192000654 0.0831039109588 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0339961261155 0.0758088955206 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0726677937363 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252400588774 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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