In a recent letter from the store owner of Central Plaza, it is concluded that skateboarding should be bane in the store, because the owners consider this practice as the main reason for their visitor declining. However, for reaching to this conclusion, the owner present a number of unsupported assumptions, most notably that skates players are related to the increasing on insecurity in the Central Mall surroundings, which directly affects their number of final visitors. Thus, more research and evidence is required before making any decision about the participation of this social groups on this particular place.
As noted above, the owner is making an assumption when he blames the number of skateboarders in Central Plaza, as the main problem for the decreasing of visitor. However, this argument is putting aside a bigger problematic which is why all these young people are not at school or maybe at their work place. The author is omitting other variables such as the economic situation of the city, which can directly affect the consumer consumptions on central malls, an also increase the number of unemployed people, which includes juveniles who may not find a job or maybe get into a school or university.
To strengthen this argument, the owner should investigate further how is the economic and social situation in the city to truly understand from where this decreasing of visitors is coming from.
In addition, the owner does not explore further other factors when he stablishes that the insecurity has increased in the surroundings of Plaza Central, blaming directly the skateboarders. Nonetheless, assuming this is also an irresponsible conclusion, if the owner has not analysed the city situation. As mention before, economic problems might be a strong cause to increase the insecurity index, and for sure, this places can be the new focus for people going through an economic crisis. At this point, the author should execute a deeper research about what kind of vandalism is appearing in Central Plaza. The owner should look for demographic statistics of the vandals that has been caught by the police, in order to understand if they actually belong to the stakeboard community, otherwise, he must reconsider the decision of bane these groups who may not be the real problematic to the Cental Mall.
As discussed above, the argument that skateboars are the main responsible of the decreasing of visitor to Central Plaza is based on a number of uninformed assumptions. On this way, further information should be analysed in order to understand the real problematic that central mall is going through. Until the owner do not based his decision in real data, this conclusion cannot be considered as certain.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 444 350
No. of Characters: 2236 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.59 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.036 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.777 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.905 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.093 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 461, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('also') instead an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
...consumer consumptions on central malls, an also increase the number of unemployed people, which ...
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Line 6, column 579, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...r research about what kind of vandalism is appearing in Central Plaza. The owner should look...
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Line 8, column 406, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lusion cannot be considered as certain.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, if, look, may, nonetheless, so, then, thus, in addition, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2301.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 444.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18243243243 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85583010049 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481981981982 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 712.8 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.6789931402 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.4 119.503703932 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6 23.324526521 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53333333333 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213078292123 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860694390148 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07375797782 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131018406515 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356175815786 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 14.3799401198 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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