In the given prompt the home owner wants his friend to contact Adams Realty in order to sell his home with the good price in a short span of time. The homeowner makes his statements in such a definitive way that Adams realtor firm is a panacea for all the real estate problems. He hence, concludes that Adams realty fetches his friend a good price. But, the author might hold water as he makes some unfounded assumptions, if they are not substantiated in a clear manner, then they shall dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the letter written by the homeowner.
Firstly, author of the letter mentions the number of real estate agents in the Adams firm and the Fitch firm as 40 and 25 respectively. But, the author fails to say how come that proves that quality of the firm can be prejudiced by the quantity- number of agents. In the contemporary world, we see many reality firms in such cases being caught for malpractice in their field. Therefore, there might also be a chance that the firm may be selling inappropriate lands to people. Hence, the quantity of the number of realtors cannot really get to be sufficient aspect to say anything about the quality of the real estate firm. Re thinking this, might make the home owner or his friend to come to the second conclusion.
Moreover, the author gives his personal example and also the records of the selling made by the realty firms- juxtaposing them with respect to average home sales. But, it also depends on the amount of probity in those statements. The author fails to mention from where did he collect these information. If these information were from the advertisements given from the respective firms, then the suggestions made by the home owner must be re thought. The advertisements are the faces of greediness of industries nowadays and may print the numbers followed by dollar signs that fascinates and attracts the consumers.
The author’s personal suggestion even though looks promising as he underwent the some tough times with Fitch realtors which took longer time unlike the Adams realtors, He fails to mentions what were the actual reasons for them to do so. The author also fails to consider that it is based on the locations that the land get sold. Hence, if these aspects are considered, the author might come to the second thought regarding via whom it is better to sell the property.
In a nutshell, the author of the letter, suggesting to his friend about the realtors may fail to persuade his friend’s mind as his conclusion that the Adams realty firm is the best is based on some of the unfounded assumptions. If they are substantiated by using the above given factors, then the author might either come to the second conclusion or ossify it rather than being in a state of conjecture.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK. need to argue:
Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 482 350
No. of Characters: 2244 1500
No. of Different Words: 218 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.686 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.656 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.544 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.1 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.24 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 453, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a clear manner" with adverb for "clear"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...umptions, if they are not substantiated in a clear manner, then they shall dramatically weaken th...
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Line 5, column 218, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...epends on the amount of probity in those statements. The author fails to mention ...
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Line 5, column 286, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...ls to mention from where did he collect these information. If these information were from the adv...
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Line 5, column 308, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...re did he collect these information. If these information were from the advertisements given from...
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Line 7, column 87, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...ugh looks promising as he underwent the some tough times with Fitch realtors which t...
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Line 7, column 186, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mention'.
Suggestion: mention
... unlike the Adams realtors, He fails to mentions what were the actual reasons for them t...
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Line 7, column 243, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e the actual reasons for them to do so. The author also fails to consider that it i...
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Line 9, column 199, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ams realty firm is the best is based on some of the unfounded assumptions. If they are subs...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, may, moreover, really, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 482.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79460580913 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67288608088 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46887966805 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6113898213 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.55 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239170384444 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738298833314 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844294311426 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131162153797 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619124482006 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.