The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.
"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
According to a magazine article, a person planning for retirement should consider Clearview. The article, staying in Clearview has lots of benefits like breathtaking views, moderate climate, low housing cost and much more. So, according to the article one should plan their retirement in Clearview only. However, the argument lies on series of assumptions which are unpersuasive and illogical. A few key factors to validate this point would be put forth in the following essay.
Firstly, it is mention in the article that Clearview has spectacular natural beauty and consistent climate. But he has not mention the things which are there to watch in Clearview. It could happen that we could watch the beauty of nature from just one side of the town and the remaining side would not get to experience this beauty. Furthermore, it is mention that there is consistent climate, but there is no mention of the temperature during the summer, winter, and amount of rainfall during moonsoons. It could happen that there is a consistent climate only during the first half of the year and in the second half there is extreme climate. So, all the things should be mention in the article as a result it becomes easier for people to decide whether they want to plan their retirement in Clearview or not.
Secondly, the article mentions that the housing cost in Clearview has become lower compare to the previous year and taxes and low then the neighbouring towns. It might happen that no one wants to live in Clearview that is the reason why the housing price is falling down. It could also happen that the town is not well connected to main cities, so the housing price are low and taxes also. So, the people should consider all these facts before confirming that they would like to spend their retirement in Clearview town.
Thirdly, according to the magazine article the mayor of Clearview has promise many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. It could happen that the current condition of these things are not very great. So, to improve things it would take many years and the people shifting now would have to suffer. If a person is planning to retire in Clearview, it means that his or her children would be old enough to pursue a career and they might have completed their education. So, money spend on improving school would not be helpful for the people coming to live in Clearview. It could also happen that the mayor is making a false promise just to increase the number of people that live in his town. The magazine also mentions that the number of physicians in Clearview are more than the national average. It might happen that people in Clearview fall sick frequently so the town has many physicians to cater to needs of the people.
In conclusion, the people should consider all the facts before making a final call of planning their retirement in Clearview. The people should consider all the aspects like the cost of moving to new place, whether their body would be able to adjust to the new climate, would they find new jobs. The people should look at a bigger picture rather than at the immediate benefit which they would get.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 547 350
No. of Characters: 2558 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.836 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.676 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.377 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 186 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.038 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.801 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.731 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.514 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'mentioned'.
Suggestion: mentioned
... and consistent climate. But he has not mention the things which are there to watch in ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 674, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'mentioned'?
Suggestion: mentioned
...e climate. So, all the things should be mention in the article as a result it becomes e...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 385, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... so the housing price are low and taxes also. So, the people should consider all the...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.9520958084 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 28.8173652695 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2620.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 547.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78976234004 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44781502059 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.400365630713 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 782.1 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.0703563557 57.8364921388 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.769230769 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0384615385 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254017869704 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810458629422 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774475810405 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159577904601 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599900975905 0.0628817314937 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.3550499002 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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