The argument has built its claim with unwarrented assumptions. The argument claims that the increase in on-the-job accidents happened because of the longer shifts comparing with nearby company and supported it with a study report which states that sleep deprivation and fatigue among workers. The conclusion of the argument has been made without further scrutiny behind the cause and that makes the argument to fall apart.
On the first hand, the argument has mentioned that, during past year, 30 percent increase in on-the-job accidents among workers at Butler Manufacturing and compared it with nearby Panoply Industries. First of all, to analyze more about the cause of accidents, we need to know about the type of accidents that had happened, which section caused the more accidents and the safety regulations being followed in that section. The accidents might have happened to novice workers who has only rudimentary experience, because of their apathy in machines handling in a machine dominated section, even though that section has followed strict safety measurements. In that case, we can’t blame neither the company’s safety regulations nor the working hours, but the ignorance of the worker. Therefore, knowing more details about the
on-the-job accidents and background reasons for the accidents are very important in making a conclusion.
Secondly, the argument has stated about the working hours by comaparing nearby company and the long hours are the reasons for increase in on-the-job accidents through out the year. Though it may seem coherent at first glance, with profound look we can see the weakening points in the statement. The argument didn’t say anything about the similarity in the two industries type. If we compare a concrete manufacturing company with a financial advice company, then the whole comparison becomes futile. Even if we consider that both companies are in the same industry, we need to know about the structure of working shifts in both companies. If one is with two five-hours shifts in a day and another is a one 8-hours shift, then talking about hours on shift based is not the right way to compare.
Finally, the argument has used very general terms and provided very less details about the study which stated sleep deprivation and fatigueness causes more on-the-job accidents among workers. If the study vaguely talks about causes for accidents but nothing about the type of workers among the study has been conducted, it agitates many questions towards its realibility.
As discussed in above paragraphs, the arguments has filled with many unstated assumptions which reduces the validity of the conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 424 350
No. of Characters: 2192 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.538 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.17 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.627 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.941 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.55 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.586 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.16 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 294, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... deprivation and fatigue among workers. The conclusion of the argument has been mad...
^^^
Line 4, column 832, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...herefore, knowing more details about the on-the-job accidents and background reas...
^^^
Line 8, column 160, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...ns for increase in on-the-job accidents through out the year. Though it may seem coherent a...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 69, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun details is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ed very general terms and provided very less details about the study which stated sl...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, talking about, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2271.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 423.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36879432624 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75357800309 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494089834515 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3851187713 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.588235294 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8823529412 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216083593116 0.218282227539 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712391424718 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0865161525205 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0973224520953 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0872278587776 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.