An investment firm provides some advice for a client to invest Consolidated Industries which is a heating oil company for some reasons. However, those reasons are based on the following assumptions.
Most homes in the northeastern United States used oil as their major fuel for heating. The firm assumes that those homes will still use oil for heating for the next years. However, people live in the northeastern United States may change their way to keep warm, for instance, using an electric heater. The price of oil has been rising in this decade because of the energy crisis. On the other hand, some renewable energy emerges and is used for generating electricity. As a result, the price of electricity declines recently. If the price of using an electric heater is lower than heating oil, there is a high chance that people replace heating oil and use an electric heater.
The climate forecasters predict that the weather in the northeastern United States will lower than normal temperatures for 90 days for several years. The firm assumes that climate prediction is correct. If the forecasters are professional, their prediction may be trust-worthy, and this may be true. However, the climate prediction may still be wrong. Weather changes quickly even in one day, so don't even mention the climate changes for years. For example, in Taiwan, typhoons come a lot in summer. According to the climate forecasters, the government closes schools and offices in the country to prevent serious damage because of a typhoon. But sometimes the forecast is wrong, the typhoon sweeps over Taiwan more quickly than expected, and people get a day off with sun and clean air.
Many new homes are being built in the region. The firm assumes that people soon will move in and the demand for heating oil increases. However, maybe these new homes are just another investment, and people will not move in for the next few years. Take my hometown for example, since the government decides to build a new MRT station nearby, the growth of new building has been continuing for years, but the population in my hometown does not increase along with the growth. As a result, the demand for heating oil and the thriving new buildings are not related.
To sum up, before the firm offers more strong evidence to support their assumptions, the client should not make a hasty decision.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly. we suppose the prediction is correct: 'that region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, and climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years'. but it didn't talk about above-normal temperatures. Maybe they are more than 90 days.
argument 3 -- OK, but it is not a good idea to use external examples to prove the argument is wrong.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 1910 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.775 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.469 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.391 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.359 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.652 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.285 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.498 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.061 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re based on the following assumptions. Most homes in the northeastern United St...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eating oil and use an electric heater. The climate forecasters predict that the...
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Line 3, column 400, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...her changes quickly even in one day, so dont even mention the climate changes for ye...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... get a day off with sun and clean air. Many new homes are being built in the re...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hriving new buildings are not related. To sum up, before the firm offers more s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, still, for example, for instance, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 399.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92481203008 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57244943998 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488721804511 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8352009724 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4347826087 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.347826087 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4347826087 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240187412398 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769402494424 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0929512962133 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123309367056 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0949768537748 0.0628817314937 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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