The following appeared in the memo from director of international students affair at Darrington college.
"To better serve the international students being admitted to Darrington college, we should build a new cafeteria for the students at subsidized rates.The current cafeteria is very old and serves only expensive items and dishes, a oint that will surely deter future international students from applying to Darrington college. Building a new cafeteria will prevent this from happening and will certainly lead to dramatic increase in popularity of college. Moreover a new cafeteria will help Darrington college to justify an increased budget for educational improvement this year.Building a new cafeteria will therefore be a great help towars enhancing the rank of Darrington college. "
The author of the given memo recommends that building a new cafeteria will increase the popularity of Darrington College and enhance the ranking of Darrington College. However, the director's argument does not seem well thought through and neglect several possibilities that could make building the new cafeteria a liability for the College.
Firstly, the author assumes that students prefer better cafeteria over a better education while choosing a college. According to author, a student will not prefer a good college which has good academics if the cafeteria in that college is old and expensive.This is not true. A student will always look for a good education first. The author also assumes that the foreign students will be poor and will not be able to afford the food in the cafeteria. Although, some students might be poor but not all can be poor. In case if many foreign students are poor then maybe they will not even buy food from new cafeteria.We need financial information about international students who studied in that college and also about the food quality of cafeteria.
Secondly, it might be also the case that cafeteria is old but its menu is eclectic and also the quality of food if very good and that's why it is in existence till now and foreign students will also like that cafeteria. The author also assumes that the popularity of the college is based on the cafeteria it posses. This assumption is wrong. A college's popularity is based on many things like the students, its professors, its labs, its results in various fields and also the education fees.
Lastly,the author has mentioned that new cafeteria will help to justify an increased budget for educational improvement. It is not correct to say this because cafeteria may or may not help in improvement. If at all the cafeteria attract more foreign student, it might happen that more number of student will hangout in cafeteria and bunk the classes.
Thus, there are many factors that determine the rank of college and cafeteria is not the only one.The director should not make any hasty decisions as it may prove to be waste of money for the college. The data about foreign entries and cafeteria should be thoroughly investigated before the director's recommendation is put into practice.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1859 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.816 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.584 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.706 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.046 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.824 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...be thoroughly investigated before the directors recommendation is put into practice.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 379.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13984168865 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80255550536 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45382585752 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.5571128022 57.8364921388 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.846153846 119.503703932 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1538461538 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.70786347227 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 5.15768463074 388% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 26.0 5.25449101796 495% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308198231279 0.218282227539 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114515957449 0.0743258471296 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740293826165 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996419203663 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569868990608 0.0628817314937 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.3799401198 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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