The argument claims that opening a hobby shop in the southeaster region of Grilldon will be beneficial to HobCo. Inc as it will provide them a stream of new customers and thus improve its business . Its claim is based on a number of findings done by New Ventures Consulting which suggests in its research that the vast majority of the population around south eastern Grilldon would welcome this move based on a poll they conducted. It also states that the Grilldon area has proven track record of good customer traction in the past hence it will be the same if a new hobby shop is opened in the southeastern area.
However it would be naive to consider that these would be the only factors which would determine the marketability of new hobby shop opened in the southeastern area.
First , there argument claim of favorable poll review by its resident is a positive sign that a hobby shop is indeed required is hollow. It does say that Grilldon has a large number of retirees who have ample free time to engage in recreational activities, however one could concur that this could be used in pursuing other interests such for those who are inclined to play sports in their free time or for those who love to teach and impart wisdom to fledging students. The demographics of the poll have not been detailed by the author which could led one to believe that the pool could be skewed.
Second, the Grilldon areas previous successful track record in the area does not surely guarantee success .
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- The following appeared in a memo from New Ventures Consulting to the president of HobCo, Inc., a chain of hobby shops."Our team has completed its research on suitable building sites for a new HobCo hobby Shop in the city of Grilldon. We discovered that th 50
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, second, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1234.0 2260.96107784 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 262.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70992366412 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49146924732 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549618320611 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 381.6 705.55239521 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.9511543316 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.25 119.503703932 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.75 23.324526521 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191095188264 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848739486467 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615268658089 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100461088686 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.081747259455 0.0628817314937 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.3799401198 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 48.3550499002 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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