The vice president of men’s clothing company, Sartorian expects the alpaca overcoat would sell very after being discontinued for the last five years. This is based on the assumption that they have not offered the alpaca overcoat for the last 5 years and major competitors are no longer making these coats which will result to a rise in customer demand. The Vice President also assumes since the prices of most of the clothing has increased in the past 5 years, people would not mind paying significantly higher prices for these coats and this would eventually increase company profits. While the reintroduction of alpaca overcoats may work as expected, specific evidence is needed to evaluate this argument.
Firstly, there needs to circumstantial evidence to support the fact the new supplier of alpaca wool fabric is reliable. There is a possibility that since, there were difficulties in obtaining the high quality wool fabric, suppliers have found ways to mix the alpaca wool with certain substances such as sheep wool, synthetic wool. Even though the difference in quality of the wool may not be visible to the naïve buyers, experienced buyers would be able to understand this difference. Not only this, as soon as the word spreads out that the quality of wool used in manufacturing the overcoats is not that good, buyers might get reluctant to buy overcoats.
Secondly, the vice president needs to support the argument using the evidence that the alpaca overcoats are still in fashion and demand. Maybe in the last 5 years, the general fashion has shift from alpaca wool to some different kind of wool. There is no evidence for the pent-up demand of these overcoats. Perhaps, the people are no longer interested in spending money on the wool products because other substitutes that might have taken place in the last 5 years. It is highly likely that people have grown more aware of the animal abuse and the animal rights because of which, people are avoiding animal based products altogether. In that case, there would lesser demands for the alpaca overcoats which is contrary to the vice president’s assumption.
Finally, there needs to evidence supporting the fact that profits will actually increase. The vice president assumes the profits will increase because the people would pay significantly higher amounts for the alpaca overcoats as cost most of the other types of clothing has also increased. Maybe, the price of the coat is higher but it is possible that the cost of making the coat as also increased. Perhaps, the alpaca wool has become expensive over the last 5 years due to the fact that there is limited availability. This would mean that the cost of processing the wool and manufacturing the coat would also increase, but might reduce the profits made per coat. So, it is imperative that there should be evidence to make sure the profits remain intact.
In conclusion, the argument stated above is significantly flawed due to the lack of evidence of certain factors as stated above. There are a number of variables that need to be examined before the alpaca overcoats’ production are resumed. Furthermore, if the company is able to generate evidence on the above stated points based on a systemic study, then perhaps it will be completely possible to evaluate the production of alpaca wool based overcoats.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 556 350
No. of Characters: 2724 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.856 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.899 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.549 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 190 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.174 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.364 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.609 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... might get reluctant to buy overcoats. Secondly, the vice president needs to su...
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Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'shifted'.
Suggestion: shifted
...e last 5 years, the general fashion has shift from alpaca wool to some different kind...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, while, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2794.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 556.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02517985612 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64506898557 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429856115108 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 879.3 705.55239521 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6213731627 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.47826087 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1739130435 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52173913043 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141348129692 0.218282227539 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0439886104846 0.0743258471296 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460156082842 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0825832158772 0.128457276422 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465092499401 0.0628817314937 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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