The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country."The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked

The memo from the vice-president is in favor of appointing Appian Roadways for the construction of the roads to the malls.And the reason cited is that one of the roads constructed by them has been in good condition for 4 years and hence if the construction of the roads to the shopping malls are constructed by Appian they will easily last for 4 years.

The claim that Appian will be a better candidate for construction of the roads is based on insufficient evidence.
There could be various reasons for the roads at route 101 having badly cracked, it could be because of frequent passing of heavy vehicles.And a road constructed by Appian would have been likely to meet the same fate.

Also the vice president states other facts such as Appian bringing in a new manager and equipment as another reason for hiring them. It is quite possible that the reason why the roads at route 40 were so robust were because of the previous manager and would it be wise to trust a rather new manager to deliver the same outcome as the previous manager

Judging a company on the basis of just a single road seems rather inadequate , others roads constructed by them and the statistics of how well they have fared should also be taken into consideration.

Also whats needs to be verified is the cost that will be incurred from from hiring either of them.It is quite possible that a company which has been deemed to build durable roads could also charge exorbitant prices for the same, And hence the budgetary limitations will also be a major factor in deciding which company to opt for

Thus a a lot of factors will need to be verified before deciding on which company to go ahead with the construction of roads to the shopping malls

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, so, thus, well, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 307.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65146579805 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57860078082 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475570032573 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 22.8473053892 223% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 149.651446888 57.8364921388 259% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 238.0 119.503703932 199% => OK
Words per sentence: 51.1666666667 23.324526521 219% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100001128749 0.218282227539 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052092535316 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0329510631976 0.0701772020484 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0514380712505 0.128457276422 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030393847399 0.0628817314937 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.1 14.3799401198 182% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.8 12.197005988 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.58 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 98.500998004 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.4 11.1389221557 201% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 310 350
No. of Characters: 1393 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.196 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.494 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.504 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 84 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 57 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 38.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.522 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.452 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.865 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.18 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5