The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.
"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument
In this argument, the author claims that it is better to choose buzzoff pest control company to provide pest control services for the sake of saving money. To support this conclusion, the author points out that the food value destroyed in plam city is higher than wintervale. it is easy to understand why the food distribution company choose buzzoff, but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions, and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands.
Firstly, the author assumes that all other conditions that might affect pest damage will remain unchanged in the future without significant evidence. On the one hand, there is no denying that the one-month evaluation is too short to determine the total capacity of a company. On the other hand, though the Fly-Away company indeed did worse than buzzoff in the past one month, there was no evidence to assert that it would not surpass buzzoff in the future. The Fly-Away company might spend more time on staff training so as to improve and perfect their service. also, more advanced equipment might be used in the future. without considering and ruling out these possible changes that might contribute to pest control result, the author can not convince me that the proposed measure will necessarily have the desired effect.
besides, another piece of evidence that might help us evaluate this claim is the statistical reliability of the survey. there is no comparison between the $20,000 and $10,000 food lost to see which warehouse loss more under the protection of two different pest control company. The author provides no evidence if there are different total values of the two warehouses. besides, the numbers lack the destroyed food’s quantities and scopes. moreover, there is no analysis of the future profit margin of the destroyed food. Thus, according to the two single numbers, we can not say buzzoff company helps to save more money than Fly-Away company.
moreover, even though the warehouse in Palm city loses more, the mere fact that the various lost degrees occurred before the companies’ different pest-control ability does not suffice to prove that Fly-Away company’s weaker capacity caused worse food situation. perhaps the true cause was the lower temperature in wintervale killed most of the pest, while pest in warmer plam city stayed actively. Or perhaps the warehouse in wintervale was newer with developed facilities to protect food, while the one in plam city was older with just fundamental facilities. Certainly, the different pest types, quantities and survive abilities under pesticide are all possible reasons for the loss. In short, a concrete connection between pest-control companies and warehouse’s loss is not effectively made.
Last but not least, a piece of lacking evidence with the argument is that the author assumes wintervale is representative of all cities in country. it is entirely possible that buzzoff company does not have enough capacity, likes open branch offices and hire more employees to provide service in other cities. Or perhaps buzzoff lack the knowledge of various pest genre outside wintervale. it is also critical to know that except buzzoff, there exist a large number of well-prepared pest-control companies in cities. Each city has the chance to choose a company according to own situation. without accounting for such possibilities, the author can not convince me that the food distribution company should cooperate with buzzoff for all their services.
In sum, the argument is not strong enough to convince me. before I can accept it, the author must supply clearer evidence that the influencing factors of pest damage remain unchanged, the money lost in two cities are under the same circumstances, there is no other reasons responsible for the pest damage in two cities and buzzoff company is strong enough to control pest in various cities.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 625 350
No. of Characters: 3169 1500
No. of Different Words: 263 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.07 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.589 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 249 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 181 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 110 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.765 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.675 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.375 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.633 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, in short, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 55.5748502994 137% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3385.0 2260.96107784 150% => OK
No of words: 630.0 441.139720559 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37301587302 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00997013923 4.56307096286 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89351844293 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 204.123752495 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453968253968 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 1051.2 705.55239521 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8235466454 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.892857143 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21428571429 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 5.25449101796 552% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 6.88822355289 232% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276202271378 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834413570306 0.0743258471296 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609484002947 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177751988653 0.128457276422 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569544125072 0.0628817314937 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 98.500998004 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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