The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouse in several cities.
“Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services”
While it may be true that the effectiveness of pest control companies as stated by the author may vary from each other, this author’s argument does not make a cogent case for mentioning several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated. It easy to understand why the author make a move to return to Buzzoff for all their pest control services at their fast-food warehouses. But this argument is rife with holes and assumptions, and thus, not strong enough to lead to evaluation of the pest control services between the two-pest control company. Hence the argument can be considered incomplete or unsubstantiated.
First of all, the argument readily assumes the pest control service by the fly-away pest control is of highly ineffective to their food storage warehouse. This is merely an assumption made without solid ground. For example, what if the latter company mentioned by the author render service in their palm city warehouse will pest reduced their damage or vice versa? Hence the argument would have been much more convincing if it explicitly stated that they have weight the competency of the two-company involved in both location of their warehouses.
The argument readily claims that the author also points out that the worth of goods based on the author analysis is not stated and this can not be effectively used to determine the quality of their services. What if the food destroyed by the pest is less expensive to the the one destroyed by fly-away pest control company?
Finally, the author cites that the price charged by buzzoff is considerably lower. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the author’s conclusion in several critical respect, and raises several skeptical question.
In conclusion, the author’s argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide clear concrete evidence, perhaps by way of a reliable detailed analysis of a food distribution company with food storage warehouse in several cities. Finally, to evaluate the argument, it would be necessary to know more information about how the companies carry out their pest control services and the analysis of the period to determine the quality of their services.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 369 350
No. of Characters: 1855 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.383 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.027 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.637 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.404 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.365 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 561, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...s between the two-pest control company. Hence the argument can be considered incomple...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 365, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...est reduced their damage or vice versa? Hence the argument would have been much more ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...troyed by the pest is less expensive to the the one destroyed by fly-away pest control ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...troyed by the pest is less expensive to the the one destroyed by fly-away pest control ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1900.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 369.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14905149051 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74553700185 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50135501355 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9754751288 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.666666667 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 5.70786347227 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333054640279 0.218282227539 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116663849565 0.0743258471296 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115013141432 0.0701772020484 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193680439661 0.128457276422 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810886696341 0.0628817314937 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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