The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
“During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The vice president of Quiot Manufacturing concerns that the job accidents increased 30 percent more than Panoply Industries in the past year. The management states that to cut one labor hour in Panoply could deduct the job accidents. Also in the memo, he mentions the experts' ideas about the negative effects of workers sleep deprivation on the job environment. This memo has a few assumptions that are not logically convincing.
Firstly, this memo doesn’t express complete and enough information about Panoply. Without having relative data, the manager can’t compare two companies correctly. The manager needs to know about the total number of personnel in Panoply, especially the accurate details of the number of product staff because they are usually more involved in work-related accidents on the product line. If the number of workers is lower, then reducing work hours is probably not an acceptable solution to reduce workplace accidents.
Secondly, Industrial accidents are also due to various plant utilization. The companies provide an advanced manufacturing environment covered a range of topics: master production scheduling, self-security of workers and improvement in job skills. Based on the reduction of one hour of work in the Panoply, it is not possible to conclude that the number of work accidents has decreased. May be at Panoply the public awareness of property, plant and equipment security are vital issues, as workers always learn the necessary skills to work with machines. Therefore proper training is likely to reduce careless and increase their concentration. They try to use machinery professionally, so they are often aware of dangerous ahead of them and prevent accidents.
This memo states the experts says that great contributing reason in many on-the-job accidents are exhaustion and sleep deprivation among workers, so the company should reduce working hours by one hour and that employees have enough time to sleep. If the company allows employees to sleep instead of working for one hour, what is the guarantee that employees will take time off to sleep. Sleeping may not solve the problem of accidents at work and is not a convenient protective method. On the other hand, some employees may have a mental illness: lack of proper learning of equipment, poor memory, lack of confidence in the workplace and other psychological issues related to their work environment. They need to see a psychiatrist at least one hour a week instead of sleeping one hour in their shift work.
In conclusion, being aware of the conditions and how safety equipment should be used by-product workers is an important factor in preventing accidents at work. So the vice president of Quiot Manufacturing should assess product conditions if the company doesn't passes advanced equipment, so he should allocates funding to buy protective equipment and training of workers in the workplace.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 463 350
No. of Characters: 2396 1500
No. of Different Words: 230 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.639 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.175 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.842 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 147 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 103 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 78 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.048 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.499 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.519 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ns that are not logically convincing. Firstly, this memo doesn't express ...
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Line 9, column 391, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...er of work accidents has decreased. May be at Panoply the public awareness of prop...
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Line 9, column 554, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...necessary skills to work with machines. Therefore proper training is likely to reduce car...
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Line 17, column 254, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ssess product conditions if the company doesnt passes advanced equipment, so he should...
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Line 17, column 301, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'allocate'
Suggestion: allocate
...passes advanced equipment, so he should allocates funding to buy protective equipment and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, at least, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2474.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 461.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36659436009 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94278790584 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503253796095 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3892201267 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.80952381 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9523809524 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281843143188 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0868038993882 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0992254761566 0.0701772020484 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161325923764 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0945175105723 0.0628817314937 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 98.500998004 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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