The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
The vice president of Quiot Manufacturing belived that shorthening each of the company’s three hour shifts by an hour will reduce the number of on-the-job accidents as happened at the company in past year. He believed this because of the record of 30 percent accident increase more than recorded at a nearby Panoply Industries plant where work shifts are one hour shorter than theirs. Ostensibly, by adopting a two-hour work shift as the other company, on-the-job accidents will reduce as experts have posited that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. However, before implementing this idea, certain aspects and questions need be considered for proper guidance.
First up, by what measure was it confirmed that the cause of the on-the-job accidents is solely due to amount of shift? As seen, the vice president has not evaluated an exhaustive research into this matter. There could be more factors responsible, if not entirely different form what he presumes. What has been the working condition of the facilities at the company as compared to the other company? If his company’s facilities are out of shape, whereas Polyply has effective and properly maintained facilities, obviously, this will most likely lend credit to the recently experienced mishaps in his company. Aslo, similar to this is to consider what the level of expertise of his company’s workers is. Are they well skilled and properly trained? There should first be an internal evaluation set up to sanitize the system and rid off unqualified personnels susceptible to hazards due to lack of ineptitude. Furthermore, the vice president need to understand that Polyply industries plant may run an entirely different business from his, thereby making it pointless to justapose the hazards prevalent at this two unrelated plants. For instance, Polyply plant may manufacture products that have lesser machine to human exposure, whereas his company has more operators working directly with moving machine parts. As a result of this, the superficial record of discrepancy of the “30 percent less” comparison will somewhat be baseless.
The vice president has also assumed that Polyply management did not have other form of achitechture in place that makes working environment more conducive for her operations. For instance, installation of machine automations may be in place that give alarms for impending accidents or out-of-order situations, alerting necessary quarters for correctional measures. If such occurs, then the vice president may need to consider similar safety measures rather than giving workers cut in shift time.
Finally, the vice president mentioned in the memo that workers will get more sleep with the extra one hour awarded them. Such conclusion is bogus and rather too hasty to be generalized on. As it is not to be mean that by duress they must have somw sleep, workers ay engage themselves with even more involving tasks within that free time for personal reasons. As such, productivity may, in fact, decline or at best remain as before even with that projected cut in work shift.
Obviously, it will be recommended that the company look into all these perspectives and rather not act, without caution, as the injuction by the vice president holds in that memo. Perhaps the on-the-job accidents in the company will be solved by having more competent workforce or looking into the safety achitectures of the company.
- The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing During the past year Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on the job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant where the work shifts are one hour shorter than our 83
- The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing During the past year Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on the job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant where the work shifts are one hour shorter than our 83
- The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing During the past year Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on the job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant where the work shifts are one hour shorter than our 83
- The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing During the past year Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on the job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant where the work shifts are one hour shorter than our 92
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'exhaustive research'.
Suggestion: exhaustive research
...n, the vice president has not evaluated an exhaustive research into this matter. There could be more f...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mations may be in place that give alarms for impending accidents or out-of-order ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, then, well, whereas, for instance, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 55.5748502994 142% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2943.0 2260.96107784 130% => OK
No of words: 554.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31227436823 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83523677247 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 204.123752495 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519855595668 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 927.0 705.55239521 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6973591247 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.625 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0833333333 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289090511999 0.218282227539 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074737515008 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0919357577594 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16198942414 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128219279999 0.0628817314937 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 98.500998004 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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