The following appeared in a memorandum from administrative head of the international students’ activities at Rydell College
“To better attend to the needs of the international students being admitted to Rydell College, we should build a new dining hall that serves food to students at subsidized rates. The current dining hall is very old and serves only expensive items and dishes, something that will certainly prevent future international students from applying to Rydell College. Building a new dining hall will avert this possibility and will definitely lead to a dramatic increase in a popularity of Rydell College. Moreover, a new dining hall will help Rydell College to justify an increased budget for educational improvement this year. Building a new dining hall will therefore be a great step towards enhancing the ranking of Rydell College.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument states that there is need of new dining hall with subsidized rates in the Rydell College to attend students need. This is because current dining hall is old and also serves expensive items. New dining hall will increase the standards of the college and will also help in justifying the increased budgets of the college for educational improvement. Therefore it will help to attract students and increase college ranking. Initial this argument looks convincing but after reading carefully we can find many loopholes in this statement.
Firstly, it states that there is a need to build a new dining for international students as cureent ne is old and costly. But it is nowhere mentioned that students have their meal in the dining hall of the college. There is a possibility that students might have find other places for their meal. Another possibility is that students might be cooking food for themselves. Also the rates of the food are not mentioned. So unless and untill we get to know the actual rates we cannot decide whether the dish is expensive or cheap. Though they have mentioned they will subsidize the rates but we dont know whether it will be affordable to those students or not. Therefore unless and until we get to know the rates we cannot decide whether the students will use their dining hall or they will eat somewhere else.
Secondly, they stated that building a new dining hall will attract the international students and will increas the popularity. But students select the college on the basis of the factors like education, facuty, placements and other factors which affect their education. Mostly students dont select the college on the basis of the dining hall they provide or by the rates of their dishes. In most of the cases international students are well prepared to cook their own food or they know other places from where they will get their food. Therefore by building a new dining hall wont attract the students as they select college on the basis of the education provided by them.
Thirdly, it is stated that a new dining hall will justify the budget of increase in educational improvement. This statement is not valid as the dining hall budget is not considered in the educational budget of a college. There are always different budgets for education and other stuffs like canteen, dining etc. Therefore adding new dining hall will justify the increase in educatinal improvement wont support the statement.
Also it has stated that building a new dining hall will enhance the rank of the Rydell College. But the ranking of the college is based on education provided by it, faculties, students and placements. Dining hall wont affect the ranking of the college as ranking will be given on the basis of factors related to education only. Therefore building new dining hall wont affect the ranking of college as it does not affect the education of the student.
Hence from the above statements we can conclude that building a new dining hall wont affect the ranking of the colllege and also it wont attract iternational students as both of them are dependent on the factors like educatiion, faculty, placements, etc
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 17 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 536 350
No. of Characters: 2586 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.812 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.825 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.486 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 193 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.615 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.674 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.366 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.568 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.21 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 28.8173652695 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2625.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 536.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8973880597 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48734195232 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.309701492537 0.468620217663 66% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 821.7 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 19.7664670659 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 536.0 22.8473053892 2346% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 57.8364921388 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2625.0 119.503703932 2197% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 536.0 23.324526521 2298% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 97.0 5.70786347227 1699% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0273503191254 0.218282227539 13% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0273503191254 0.0743258471296 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0184815621674 0.128457276422 14% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186565085675 0.0628817314937 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 269.6 14.3799401198 1875% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -464.1 48.3550499002 -960% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.1628742515 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 211.2 12.197005988 1732% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.62 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 32.58 8.32208582834 391% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 12.3882235529 444% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 216.4 11.1389221557 1943% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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