The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 males and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
An argument is presented in an article in the business field. A survey of 300 male and female advertising executives found that individuals who slept fewer than six hours a night were more productive and helped their organizations make more money and expand more quickly. The argument rendered is not cogent enough and has some ambiguities.
Firstly, the survey considered has been done overall on only 300 males and females who are advertising executives. The question is whether the number of individuals used in the study is adequate for such a conclusion. Whether the consideration of only executives is rational? Do not other individuals and employees have a role in this subject? In my view, by consideration of executives, the researchers intentionally give orientation to their survey. This can cause bias, which is not desirable. The results of the study would have been more acceptable if the researchers would have randomly used other individuals with different positions.
In the survey, whether or not the physical conditions of people have been considered. Has the performance of people sleeping more than 6 hours been considered? It is possible that the disparities in the results are not significant. As a result, the consideration of this subject as a factor in choosing employees can be wrong. This is because sometimes this factor can cause employers to lose a better workforce. In my view, the consideration of such a factor is not good, as work experience, IQ, university qualification and other merits can be more useful for the assessment of individuals.
There is no evidence about the factors considered in the survey. We do not know about the kind of factor used in the survey. We do not know whether the factors used for the analysis of the survey are correct or not. This type of ambiguity can easily question the validity of the survey. There are no statistical figures for the survey done. This situation can cause referees to assume that the survey has been done just based on some empirical experiences without any scientific proof.
There is no mention of the number of companies used in the survey. We cannot exactly fathom whether the number used was enough or not. There is no mention of the number of companies used in the survey. We cannot exactly fathom whether the number used was enough or not. Also, the writer has not pointed out the type of companies. We do not know whether the companies used had the same work context or not. Another question is whether the samples used in the survey were comparable.
In conclusion, the argument mentioned by the writer had been more valid if he would have used more information to resolve all obscurities and weaknesses in the survey.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 16, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...h different positions. In the survey, whether or not the physical conditions of people have ...
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Line 6, column 79, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had used'?
Suggestion: had used
...by the writer had been more valid if he would have used more information to resolve all obscuri...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2266.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 458.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94759825328 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87177588563 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412663755459 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 736.2 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 19.7664670659 152% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8510560295 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.5333333333 119.503703932 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2666666667 23.324526521 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.56666666667 5.70786347227 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0860243900291 0.218282227539 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0266748653109 0.0743258471296 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495831177105 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0535063636256 0.128457276422 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657034472691 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 14.3799401198 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 16, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...h different positions. In the survey, whether or not the physical conditions of people have ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 79, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had used'?
Suggestion: had used
...by the writer had been more valid if he would have used more information to resolve all obscuri...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2266.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 458.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94759825328 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87177588563 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412663755459 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 736.2 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 19.7664670659 152% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8510560295 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.5333333333 119.503703932 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2666666667 23.324526521 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.56666666667 5.70786347227 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0860243900291 0.218282227539 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0266748653109 0.0743258471296 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495831177105 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0535063636256 0.128457276422 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657034472691 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 14.3799401198 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.