The following appeared in the summary of a study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia.
"Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, for the past several decades, food-processing companies have also been adding salicylates to foods as preservatives. This rise in the commercial use of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in our twenty-year study. Recently, food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. With this new use for salicylates, we can expect a continued steady decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The prediction of the less headaches fo the citizens of Mentia is based many different assumptions that would need futher context in order to evaluate their validility.
One assumption is that salicylates and aspirin act the same. While members of the same chemical family may act similar and share similar chemical make-up, it is important to remember that the members are not the same. It also key remember that chemicals can act differently in various states. Water can be a solid, liquid, or gas depending on the tempature or the pressure that is being used on it. If salicylates acted differently from aspirin due to the state they were in when they entered food, then the effect of taking aspirin and salicylates would be different. This would cripple the argument since it was assumed that salicylates and aspirin acted the same. Assuming salicylates are the same as aspirin is a key element for the prediction that is being made.
The idea that rise in commercial use of salicylates related to the decline in average number of headaches reported is key to the argument being made. If this were true, the assumption in the last sentence would be accurate since it assumes that the increase in salicylates being introduced as flavor additives would also decrease head aches. However, if the decreases to head aches in the population was due to another factor, then the argument for a continued decrease in headaches due to salicylates would be null. An example of another factor is an increases in exercise or in sleep by the average citizen. Another key assumption is that an increase in salicylates will not result in an increase of other side effects. An increase of salicylates could also create additional problems since it would lead to an overdose in that chemical. Taking too much aspirin can cause bleeding and nausal and these symptons could prove fatal if a person conitued to take them. Correlation between the increase in the use of salicylates in food and the decline in headaches for the average citizen is the biggest part of the argument for prediction of the decreases in headaches in future.
Predicting how an increase in salicylates would effect the number of headaches is difficult.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The prediction of the less headaches fo the citizens of Mentia is based many different assumptions that would need futher context in order to evaluate their validility.
Error: fo Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: validility Suggestion: validity
Error: futher Suggestion: father
Sentence: Water can be a solid, liquid, or gas depending on the tempature or the pressure that is being used on it.
Error: tempature Suggestion: mature
Sentence: Taking too much aspirin can cause bleeding and nausal and these symptons could prove fatal if a person conitued to take them.
Error: conitued Suggestion: continued
Error: nausal Suggestion: nasal
Error: symptons Suggestion: symptoms
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 373 350
No. of Characters: 1811 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.395 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.855 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.706 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.941 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.058 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.412 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.356 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 23, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun headaches is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
The prediction of the less headaches fo the citizens of Mentia is ...
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Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ches fo the citizens of Mentia is based many different assumptions that would need futher cont...
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Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'keys'?
Suggestion: keys
...t the members are not the same. It also key remember that chemicals can act differe...
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Line 5, column 550, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an increase' or simply 'increases'?
Suggestion: an increase; increases
...e null. An example of another factor is an increases in exercise or in sleep by the average ...
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Line 5, column 1169, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...rediction of the decreases in headaches in future. Predicting how an increase in salicy...
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Line 7, column 49, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...ng how an increase in salicylates would effect the number of headaches is difficult. ...
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Line 7, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t the number of headaches is difficult.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1847.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 373.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95174262735 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73669686585 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436997319035 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 616.5 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2121844034 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.647058824 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9411764706 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.29411764706 5.70786347227 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179541118179 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699319661403 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485797552759 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109037568169 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543754299934 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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