The claim that participation in social media is the major cause for the increased number of people who take part in voting during elections is not logically well-reasoned. There are several facets to be studied before drawing the conclusion. Several loopholes are present in the arugments presented by the author.
The number of people who vote in elections is not only determined merely by the number of young people in the town. The author does not mention about the number of people of other age group. The reader does not know if there is greater number of older people who take part in voting in Chiswick. The statistics of all the eligible age group of people should have been presented in the argument to prove that young people contribute most the number of voters.
One of the assertions made is that the people who involce regarlar in social media and make themselves updated about the political and socail issues are the ones who consider participating in voting. But, this assertion is not well-established. Those who are aware of the political situation does not imply that they certainly vote. Although they are updated on the social issues, they might not be interested in voting. Some people like to read news just as a hobby. More survey results must be presented to show that they are the ones who surely vote in elections.
Young adults who use social media at least once a day might might be using the media for getiing political information and news. They might be using it for chatting and getting other information. More detials should be provided to show that those people use social media for getting political knowledge.
Another important point to be noted is the credibility and quality of the survey conducted among young people. The article fails to present whether the survey was conducted among the representative group of young adults or a restricted group. The article mentions that the survey was conducted recently, but "recent" does not indicate the specific point of time. Therefore, more details regarding the survey conducted should be provided in the article to prove the validity of the survey.
In conclusion, the argument is weak to prove that people participating in social media are the ones who certainly vote, which eventually adds up to the increase in the total number of voters in that area. Other statistics must be presented to show prove the author's conclusion.
- The following editorial appeared in the Lamont Times newspaper quot During last year s election only 35 percent of people living in Lamont voted whereas inthe nearby affluent town of Chiswick that number was 75 percent In a recent survey ofyoung ad 70
- CLAIM Young people s tendency to make extensive use of portable devices like smartphones and tablets has hurt their development of social skills REASON These devices encourage users to form artificial personalities and relationships online rather than ful 54
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 407 350
No. of Characters: 1975 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.492 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.853 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.558 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.512 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.273 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
he claim that participation in social medi...
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Line 1, column 4, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'claims'.
Suggestion: claims
he claim that participation in social media is t...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 192, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...he number of people of other age group. The reader does not know if there is greate...
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Line 3, column 297, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...le who take part in voting in Chiswick. The statistics of all the eligible age grou...
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Line 7, column 55, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: might
...ho use social media at least once a day might might be using the media for getiing politica...
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Line 11, column 259, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ics must be presented to show prove the authors conclusion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, at least, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2033.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 407.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99508599509 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70626301124 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432432432432 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 645.3 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.6889834252 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4090909091 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.90909090909 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122983985386 0.218282227539 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431872521718 0.0743258471296 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506752588463 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0688063362098 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501583196607 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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