The following letter is from a group of Linford College alumni to the chair of the art department at the college.
"In a recent survey of college graduates, 90 percent agree that participating in an internship increased their chances of finding a job after graduation, but last year, only 40 percent of Linford`s graduating art students had completed an internship. SkyDesigns, located in nearby Linford City, is the perfect company for students to intern with for a number of reasons: They offer internships in all of their departments, so every student is sure to find work that they are interested in. Additionally, their internships offer flexible working hours. Finally, Skyway Designs is known for being one of the best in the design business, as over 80 percent of businesses in Linford City have used the services of Skyway Designs for their design needs. Given the vital role that work experience plays in a student`s success after graduation, we recommend that our art department require all art students to complete an internship with Skyway Designs before graduation.
The argument presented here is written by a group of Linford college alumni to the chair they state that college should require all students to complete the internship with company called Sky Design before graduation and they profound that this company is the in the area. Therefore the authors recommend that a group of who complete an internship from this company helps to boost the success of graduates and helps to find lucrative jobs. However, the argument rather unconvincing given the obvious flaws in logic and irrevelent conclusions.
To begin, the letter premises that- there was a recent survey where 90% agreed that internship helped them to get better jobs. was a sample representative? Unless, there is data about how many students responded to the survey, this data is incomclusive. How much 90% we have no idea. Additionally, when the authors state only 40% of graduating arts students did an internship. They should state that how they got percentages? For instance, what if only 6 responded out of 200?
Moreover, the authors propund vague terms that skyway Desingers offer internship in all their departments and therefore every students is sure to find work there. In order to this premise to be reliable, the authors should address which departments are present in the `company? For eg. What is students is a sculpting major or other art designs? Thus, in the absence of more detailed the authors premise appears erroneous.
Last but not least, the authors contend that Sky Design is one of the best Design business in area. The authors need to answer, Are there other design agencies in the area? What are the price of this business compared to the area. The designs might be cheap and low quality.
To sum up, argument could have been convincing if authors had provided more germane data. There is discrepancies in its explanation. Thus the argument have flaws and unconvicinig.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 274, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...d that this company is the in the area. Therefore the authors recommend that a group of ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... Therefore the authors recommend that a group of who complete an internship from...
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Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
... the authors recommend that a group of who complete an internship from this compan...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Was
...ernship helped them to get better jobs. was a sample representative? Unless, there ...
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Line 5, column 90, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[3]
Message: Did you mean 'There are discrepancies'?
Suggestion: There are discrepancies
...authors had provided more germane data. There is discrepancies in its explanation. Thus the argument h...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...re is discrepancies in its explanation. Thus the argument have flaws and unconvicini...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, therefore, thus, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 317.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02839116719 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72446379723 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545741324921 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.6247478975 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.9047619048 119.503703932 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0952380952 23.324526521 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176613940033 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0364332300775 0.0743258471296 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591196330135 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0808041991015 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795899201379 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 14.3799401198 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.3 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 274, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...d that this company is the in the area. Therefore the authors recommend that a group of ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 312, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... Therefore the authors recommend that a group of who complete an internship from...
^^
Line 1, column 323, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
... the authors recommend that a group of who complete an internship from this compan...
^^^
Line 2, column 127, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Was
...ernship helped them to get better jobs. was a sample representative? Unless, there ...
^^^
Line 5, column 90, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[3]
Message: Did you mean 'There are discrepancies'?
Suggestion: There are discrepancies
...authors had provided more germane data. There is discrepancies in its explanation. Thus the argument h...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...re is discrepancies in its explanation. Thus the argument have flaws and unconvicini...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, therefore, thus, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 317.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02839116719 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72446379723 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545741324921 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.6247478975 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.9047619048 119.503703932 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0952380952 23.324526521 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176613940033 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0364332300775 0.0743258471296 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591196330135 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0808041991015 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795899201379 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 14.3799401198 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.3 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.