The argument drawn by the parent states consequences of replacing management of the cafeteria to Swift Nutrition, which serves low-fat and healthy food. In the argument, the parent reaches to the conclusion that if the management of cafeteria is not replaced, it will be serious health consequences for Kensington students. This conclusion is based on certain assumptions and if these assumptions turn the other way round, it may weaken the conclusion drawn by the argument.
The argument states that the students do not find food of cafeteria enjoyable after Swift has taken over the management of canteen. This argument is based on what the son of the parent and his friends thinking. It is not clear that how many students is covered under the son's friends. If the friends are consist of only 5 percent of the total students, it is very difficult to state that students do not find the food of the cafeteria enjoyable. If the argument states any numbers of how many students do not find it enjoyable, then we can come to certain conclusion.
The parent also states in the argument that the intent of hiring Swift for management of cafeteria for serving low-fat and healthy food will not be fulfilled because the students will bring their own unhealthy lunches and will not have food from cafeteria. There are two assumptions for stating this particular statement. It is not clearly mentioned why Swift is given the management of the cafeteria. It is absolutely possible that Kensington hired Swift as it was taking less money for management of cafeteria. So unless we know the actual intent of Kensington behind bringing Swift, we can't state that Kensington will not succeed in its intention. If the intention behind bringing Swift is just to save money, even if students do not take lunches from cafeteria, it will serve intent for Kensington.
Second assumption in the above stated argument is that plan of bringing Swift for cafeteria will cause students to bring their own, unhealthy lunches of their own. But it is also possible that students will continue to bring their own lunches regardless of what company is managing the cafeteria. If argument tells about how students started bringing their own lunches after the Swift has taken over the management, it will strengthen the argument of the parent that the students may not bring their lunches if Swift is not managing the cafeteria.
These were the assumptions underlying the argument that Swift Nutrition may cause serious health consequences for Kensington students. If the arguments gives conclusive evidence of the assumptions, it will strengthen the argument. Otherwise, we can not accept the conclusion drawn by the parent in his argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 448 350
No. of Characters: 2228 1500
No. of Different Words: 156 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.601 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.973 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.643 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.616 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.39 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.59 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.188 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 305, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'consisted'.
Suggestion: consisted
...er the sons friends. If the friends are consist of only 5 percent of the total students...
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Line 5, column 590, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...of Kensington behind bringing Swift, we cant state that Kensington will not succeed ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2274.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 448.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07589285714 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73587149283 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.379464285714 0.468620217663 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 675.9 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9932348454 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.7 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.55 5.70786347227 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206357636402 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815471173005 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559594879945 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125276985293 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579346021266 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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