The argument that Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child, is flawed for numerous reasons. The argument does not give us the clear understanding of why Pirouettes is the clear choice for any child. We will consider the whole argument and we will get to what are the questions that needs to be answered in order to make the argument strong that Pirouettes is the clear choice for any child.
The argument tells that many of the students have gone on to become professional dancers. This is a very vague statement and does not give exact representation of school's success rate. If the argument has some information of what percentage of students of the school have gone on to become professional dancers, it will give you idea about what is the success rate of Pirouettes and you can decide whether to choose Pirouettes or not.
Argument also talks about the teachers of the school. Argument tells that teachers of the school have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. But it does not give information about if these teachers can teach good ballet dancing or not. There may be the case where the teacher is highly talented and perform excellent ballet, but the teacher may not have abilities to teach that talent to students. Also, these teachers may have worked for very less amount of time with ballet companies, and they have become teacher in the school. These type of teachers does not make the school does not make the 'clear choice' for ballet dancing. It is possible that there are other Ballet schools that have teachers who have not worked with prestigious ballet companies, but they are more talented and they have ability to teach Ballet in a good way. So this needs to be clarified for making the argument strong.
Argument also claims that Pirouettes has most intensive program. But it does not mean that more intensive program will make you best ballet dancer. It is possible that other schools have program that is not as intensive as Pirouettes, but it may cover other aspects of Ballet which Pirouettes is not covering and it makes the school better than Pirouettes. So, if the argument has some kind of information around what makes the course of Pirouettes more intensive, and how it helps in learning Ballet dancing for small children, it will make the conclusion of Pirouettes being clear choice for Ballet dancing stronger.
So, if the arguments talks about the success rate of the past students, about the ability of the teachers to teach Ballet and about the course that what things make it intensive, it will be clear the conclusion of the argument that Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 464 350
No. of Characters: 2186 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.641 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.711 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.392 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.579 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.401 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.602 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.218 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 125, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'you the best'.
Suggestion: you the best
...n that more intensive program will make you best ballet dancer. It is possible that othe...
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Line 7, column 188, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'programed', 'programmed'.
Suggestion: programed; programmed
... It is possible that other schools have program that is not as intensive as Pirouettes,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2233.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 464.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8125 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4460276452 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.342672413793 0.468620217663 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 671.4 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.8734192152 57.8364921388 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.526315789 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4210526316 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.63157894737 5.70786347227 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.463658525902 0.218282227539 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177173900653 0.0743258471296 238% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11229492238 0.0701772020484 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261924974526 0.128457276422 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847298922833 0.0628817314937 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 8.32208582834 81% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 98.500998004 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.