The author presents the memorandum of Happy Pancake House, and how the introduction of margarine has not had significant impact on the sales of the business. The conclusion devised by the author, though, is based on assumptions which makes it unreliable.
According to the author, customers accepted the new change brought about by Happy Pancake House. He mentions that only two percent of customers complained, meaning ninety eight percent were happy with the change. This fact is based on an assumption that all the customers who did not complain were happy with introduction of margarine. It may be that they had accepted the change even though they did not really like margarine. Or margarine with pancake tasted just as same as butter with pancake. There may be various other reasons that the customers did not complain about margarine on pancakes. It may be that they wanted some change to take place in the menu, after the monotonous menu presented by Happy Pancake House. Therefore, the conclusion is unreliable.
Additionally, the author also claims that the change has brought "little" impact on the sales of the business. Thus, author gives no definite numbers as to how much difference in sales is observed due to the change. The author should have presented the exact numbers to make the conclusion full proof, by giving information about when was the the survey conducted, how many customers were a part of the survey, what were the feedbacks given by the customers, what was the sales before the introduction of margarine and after the introduction of margarine, is the change only the result of introduction of margarine, what are other factors that have affected the sales. The author fails to answer these important questions which would have made the conclusion more solid.
Thus the conclusion fails to be reliable and the author must present a more detailed survey to give a solid conclusion.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 317 350
No. of Characters: 1562 1500
No. of Different Words: 140 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.22 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.927 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.587 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.148 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.373 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: ninety-eight
...ercent of customers complained, meaning ninety eight percent were happy with the change. Thi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...f, by giving information about when was the the survey conducted, how many customers we...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...f, by giving information about when was the the survey conducted, how many customers we...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...have made the conclusion more solid. Thus the conclusion fails to be reliable and...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, therefore, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 317.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10410094637 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7856443612 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473186119874 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.5357878901 57.8364921388 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.866666667 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142460670668 0.218282227539 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572349852634 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625929342174 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0872410386931 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702657416612 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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