The following is a memorandum from the office of Mayor Harrison Peter Jones.
“In order to relieve Briggsville’s notorious traffic congestion, Mayor Harrison Peter
Jones plans to build a multi-million-dollar subway system. The subway will run
through the major downtown areas, a part of the town where buses serve as the only
form of public transportation. For years, residents have been complaining both about
inconsistent buses and the general lack of safety while riding the buses. Additionally,
the subway will be running twenty-four hours a day. Since motorists will spend less
time in traffic, Mayor Harrison Peter Jones expects to see an immediate increase in
worker productivity, which will improve the economy of Briggsville.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the
argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the
implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Adding subway system definitely will improve the transportation in the city but it will not eliminate the problems already existed in the buses, rather than creating some new problems that the society of the town have not faced it before.
The first major issue that will appear from such a move is that the instruction accompanied with establishing the subway will cause the town with more traffic that will make moving within the city insufferable. This whole building movement cannot be finished with a day it will last at least months, a move the inhabitants are fine without it.
A second reason weaken this plan is that the problems in the bus transportation will still exist even if the subway created. A set of real improvements should be taken directly on this type of transportation such: more penalties on the hasty driver to prevent them from any carelessness while driving dozens of lives, and bringing more arrangement within the trips of these buses to avoid any crowd traffic. In the contrary the subway will attract people to use it instead of the buses which will cause them financial problems, such one train need only driver but larger capacity; i.e. less workers.
A third weakness in the plan lies in that the subway will reduce the amount of time in the traffic it might be wrong. Since not all the motorists will use the subway and actually there is no way to figure out the number without really examine the tendency to use the subway. Based in this what the town needs to improve the economy of the town is a more serious solutions concentrated directly in increasing the incomes of the inhabitants.
A forth weakness lies in running the subway 24 hours, it might be economically wrong to spend more many in the subway, let’s say at the midnight, when the number of the people using the train is pretty low. Furthermore the annoyance produced from the subway in the night will disturb the people in what should calm night meant to get some rest.
No one argues with the importance of the subway but the way the mayor thinks this is a solution for problems tangential to the subway is fragile.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 372 350
No. of Characters: 1721 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.392 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.626 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.474 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.517 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.403 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.712 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 588, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun workers is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...d only driver but larger capacity; i.e. less workers. A third weakness in the pl...
^^^^
Line 9, column 214, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...e people using the train is pretty low. Furthermore the annoyance produced from the subway ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, furthermore, if, may, really, second, so, still, third, while, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 372.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75806451613 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53718301754 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508064516129 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.0160829615 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.5 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 23.324526521 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 5.70786347227 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199320278533 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807679717633 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389011222195 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109518026922 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179997665197 0.0628817314937 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.