The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the recommendation from the Monarch Books board of Directors, the author states that opening a cafe will allow Monarch to attract more customers and compete better with Regals Books. This argument fails to mention several key factors of which the conclusion can be evaluated. However, careful scrutiny of this argument reveals that it contains several unwarranted assumption which will made the this argument highly suspect. In other to evaluate this recommendations, the following questions need to be answered.
Firstly, what are the evidence that Monarch has before concluding that opening Cafe will attract more customers?.Monarch books just make a conclusion that cafe will attract more customers without giving any evidence to support it. It uses Regal Books who recently open its own cafe to compare itself. It is possible that Regal is not having much customer base and after it has successful carry out it own research, it find out that people has more interest in cafe than in buying of books. Monarch is already known for his wide selection of books on all subject and this could have have been the major reason why it is having much customers. It would have been more convincing if Monarch books conduct a survey to know if customers are really having interest in cafe before discontinuing the children's book section .
Secondly, does the customers of Monarch Books or resident where Monarch book is located are computer literate? Customers buying books does not mean they know how to operate computers. Cafe is only use when one need to use the interest to browse or search for information and it possible that customers of Regal are computer literate . Since Monarch has been in the business for more than twenty years, how many times has customers requested for cafe?. It is possible that customers dont know how to operate the internet and maybe only small percentage can operate it. Monarch books should conduct some survey, and provide the percentage of people who prefer to use the internet to those who dont use it before opening its cafe.
Thirdly, will customer base still increase if Monarch discontinue its Children books section? Although the recent national census indicated in the argument state that there was a decline in the percentage of population under age 10 but not percentage of customers who buy books for under 10 student. this is entirely different survey. Another question to ask is that the children section of Monarch books limited only to books for children under age ten?. Since, Monarch has been known for wide selection of book either under age 10 or above, discontinuing the children section is not an appropriate decision. Is it possible that customers are coming to buy from Monarch because of different selection of books they can get in Monarch books. Discontinuing the children books section will make customers buy from other bookstores.
In conclusion, this argument, has it stands now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. Monarch book need to provide answers to the questions above and provide more evidence( perhaps in form of systematic research study) so has to recommend its opening and the viability of the Cafe . However, the Children Book section should not be discontinued.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 19 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 539 350
No. of Characters: 2693 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.818 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.996 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.576 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 199 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 165 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 102 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.458 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.524 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.34 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.537 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2749.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 538.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10966542751 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70152158606 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421933085502 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 856.8 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8262224629 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.96 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.52 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 32.0 5.25449101796 609% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423074397451 0.218282227539 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134404710944 0.0743258471296 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101726077174 0.0701772020484 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242346599524 0.128457276422 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582303025893 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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