The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But 80 percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The arguer recommend Grove College keep its century-old tradition of all-female education and demur the suggestion to admitting men into its program. To support the claim, the author cites the survey and gives the reasons, for example, all female will improve morale(斗志) and bring more financial supports from alumnae. However, reveals that it lends little credible support to the argument.
First, the survey quoted by the author is not reliable. Due to the lack of certain evidence, the survey cannot indicate the author's idea of remaining all-female education. First of all, it mentions in the paragraph that in the survey conducted by the student government, over 80 percent of students support to keep all-female education, but it is unclear that how many students take part in the survey. If there are only 10 students attending the survey, these 10 students cannot represent all the student in the college. Moreover, most of the students enrolled in Grove College may be attracted by the characteristics of all-female. Thus, for these students, it is no hesitation to champion the speciality as an attraction and they love. In short, without better tools that the survey is statistically reliable, the author cannot rely on it to conclude any firm idea.
Furthermore, the author fails to create a causal relationship between all-female education and morale improvement. It is highly possible that there are many other factors that can impact the morale in Grove College. First, the education quality will affect the morale. As a college, the most important thing is to provide a high-quality education. Good teachers are a significant factor to lead student to a higher level. Not only the well-skilled and patient professor, but the good study environment is also necessary for students to study better. In addition, it is also likely that employment rate could influent the morale. If employment rate for graduates is high, students will have a clear goal and working harder to maintain the advantages brought back by the graduates. Lacking evidence that links A to B, it is presumptuous to suggest that all-female education will improve the morale of Grove College students.
Moreover, the author thinks that keep all-female education will bring constant financial support from alumnae, which is unreliable, since there can be many other reasons impact the decisions whether the alumnae want to continue to give the Grove College supports. First, the reputation of the college is important. The college where the person graduated from sometimes is a representation of the person's honor. If the college's reputation will give the alumnae positive effect, they are surely willing to support their school, and vice versa. Second, the resources of the school and other alumnae are also important. If the school and other alumnae can give support when one faces difficulties in his career or health, one will return the favors for the school because the Grove College gives one this chance to requicken. Based on these factors that can vacillate alumnae's decisions, the author cannot say firmly that keeping all-female education sure to bring financial support from alumnae.
From what have been discussed above, the arguer fails to convince readers by jumping to a conclusion that does not hold up to analysis. To strengthen the argument, the arguer needs to find more research that can support the idea that all-female environment will bring more benefits towards the Grove College than co-education.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 563 350
No. of Characters: 2881 1500
No. of Different Words: 251 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.871 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.117 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.665 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 228 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 173 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 115 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 75 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.107 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.495 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.295 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.485 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 125, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...vidence, the survey cannot indicate the authors idea of remaining all-female education....
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Line 7, column 419, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'colleges'' or 'college's'?
Suggestion: colleges'; college's
...esentation of the persons honor. If the colleges reputation will give the alumnae positi...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, thus, well, for example, in addition, in short, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2958.0 2260.96107784 131% => OK
No of words: 563.0 441.139720559 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2539964476 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76502891122 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 204.123752495 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472468916519 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 920.7 705.55239521 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5724354523 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.642857143 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1071428571 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.89285714286 5.70786347227 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.20758483034 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219565466617 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644586012429 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873146023797 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138244973013 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590919445615 0.0628817314937 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 98.500998004 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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