“The following was used as part of an internet advertising company’s appeal to businesses: Furniture Depot employed our internet advertising company to help. Since then its sales increased by 10% over last year’s totals. Furniture Depot’s success demonstrates how using our internet services can increase your profitability. ”
The prompt suggests, an internet advertisinng company states that it can improve their client's sales, which inturn results in the profits for the company. It promotes itself by it's furniture depot client stating it has helped the company gain it's profitability and increased it sales by 10%. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, two questions must be answered.
First of all, there might be many factors for the sales of the products to increase or decrease, is advertising only the factor to increase the sales? It is possible that, the quality of products has increased eventually which might inturn help to improve the number of sales. Further, it might be a loss for them if they invest on these advertising company, as 10% which is stated is a trivial one , which could possibly be by increasing the quality of the product. If this scenario has merit, then conclusion drawn in the original argumentis significantly weakened.
Secondly, promt assumes that advertising the product leads to the profitablity of the company Is that always true? It is possible that, there might be no difference even if the product is not advertised and it also assumes that the advertisements are reaching the targetted audience. Further, there is no proper evidence that the advertising company would target the required audience, but claims that it can increase their client profits. If the above is true, the the argument does not hold water.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarrented assumptions. If the author is able to answer these questions above and offer more evidence, perhaps, in the form of a systematic research study, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation that by seeking help of the advertisement company could potentially increase the number of sales and profits.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 312 350
No. of Characters: 1564 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.203 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.013 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.84 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.677 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.575 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 359, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hey invest on these advertising company, as 10% which is stated is a trivial one ...
^^
Line 3, column 400, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... as 10% which is stated is a trivial one , which could possibly be by increasing t...
^^
Line 3, column 409, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...hich is stated is a trivial one , which could possibly be by increasing the quality of the pro...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 463, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...r client profits. If the above is true, the the argument does not hold water. In con...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 463, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...r client profits. If the above is true, the the argument does not hold water. In con...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 312.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16025641026 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91164938313 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532051282051 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3050331816 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.846153846 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 5.70786347227 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239744438741 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851945837817 0.0743258471296 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771637654923 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144274793594 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411772290092 0.0628817314937 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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