"In general, people are not as concerned as they were a decade ago about regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheeses. Walk into Heart's Delight, a store that started selling organic fruits and vegetables and whole-grain flours in the 1960's, and you will also find a wide selection of cheeses made with high butterfat content. Next door, the owners of the Good Earth Cafe, an old vegetarian restaurant, are still making a modest living, but the owners of the new House of Beef across the street are millionaires."
The argument deals with establishing a causal relationship between certain places, selling food items, and people's preference of intake of red meat. The argument tries to conclude that people are les concerned about their intake of red meat now than they were a decade ago. The argument base its conclusion on two phenomena, which are unconvicning. The author base his opinion and conclusion on unfounded claims and unsupported evidence, which clearly have several flaws.
First, the author makes his concluding remark on people's concern of intake of red meat and base it on Heart's Delight store's change in inventory. Author claims that since the store is also selling wide selection of cheese made with high fat content, it must be doing so in order to sustain its sales as people are now buying more high fat cheese than orgainc fruits. This claim is highly unreasonable as it fails to estalish the exact cause or causes of this inventory upgradation by the store. There could be several other reasons, which have caused the store to make such a change in its product listings. Nonetheless, author also fails to mention if the store's sales have increased after making such a change.
Second, the argument base its conclusion on another cafe, Good Earth Cafe and uses the cafe owner's modest living to establish that Good Earth Cafe is not doing farly good in terms of sales and revenue. This claim is also seriously flawed and unwarranted as a person's modest living and lifestyle does not relate to his or her declining business and nonetheless people concern of consuming more red meat. There could be multiple other reasons for the owner of this store to mantain a lifestyle like this and various other factors contrbuting to the beef store owners earning millions. Nevertheless, one cannot correlate one of these phenomenan with declining concerns of red meat intake.
Our faith in this argument could have been streghthened if the author would have mentioned Heart's Delight revenue before making changes to its product listing versus what it is now after making the changes, hence, we would have seen a strong ground for how the beef purchase is increasing. Another strenghthener could be the Good Earth cafe's owners profiling, that is, if we would have known how many business does the owner owns and the level of profits from each of those, we could have believed that slow sales of vegetarian food is the cause of their modest living.
In conclusion, this argument lacks important information, on which the causal relationship mentioned, could be based. The argument contains too many asumptions for which no supporting evidence has been provided by the author, hence, this argument is clearly unconving and not well reasoned.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 455 350
No. of Characters: 2247 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.619 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.938 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.486 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.765 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.259 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.59 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 275, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d meat now than they were a decade ago. The argument base its conclusion on two phe...
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Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... two phenomena, which are unconvicning. The author base his opinion and conclusion ...
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Line 5, column 258, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...lso seriously flawed and unwarranted as a persons modest living and lifestyle does not re...
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Line 7, column 71, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had mentioned'?
Suggestion: had mentioned
...ld have been streghthened if the author would have mentioned Hearts Delight revenue before making ch...
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Line 7, column 376, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had known'?
Suggestion: had known
... cafes owners profiling, that is, if we would have known how many business does the owner owns a...
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Line 7, column 426, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'own'?
Suggestion: own
... known how many business does the owner owns and the level of profits from each of t...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, so, then, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2294.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 455.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04175824176 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55187834384 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492307692308 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6380663833 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.941176471 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7647058824 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143688869227 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597348718264 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0856096230984 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0837533032211 0.128457276422 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0713018647455 0.0628817314937 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.