The given argument is based on some facts which are essentially not enough to prove that it will solve the problem of vitamin deficiency in the village. There are much more explanations required to know whethe it will really be able to solve the problem or not.
Firstly, it is told here that the new engineered bread is costly and subsidies will be paid but it is not sure that the farmers will be able to cultivate properly because of lacking knowledge on the new product. Again the lands of Tagus's reaction towards the new breed of millet is unknown. They might not be as fertile as other crops. So answers of these things are required to know whether the problem will mitigate or not.
Second, it is said that people of Tagus stapled millet nicely but that doesn't necessarily answer that question that whether the new bread is going to taste similar or not. Again, there is further information required about the taste of new breed of millet to resolve the problem.
Finally, the government will be taking necessary steps for the promotion of millet but that does not entirely ensures the fact that it is going to be taken by the people who just came to know about a breed with ample amount of vitamin A. So, will the people accept the new food or not is a big question to be answered to ensure the problem to be solved.
so, in conclusion we need to know some more fact about the problem by answering a few questions discussed above. Hope these will help greatly to solve the matter.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 272 350
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 272 350
No. of Characters: 1198 1500
No. of Different Words: 135 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.061 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.404 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.27 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 76 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 55 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 27 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 16 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.471 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.666 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...be able to solve the problem or not. Firstly, it is told here that the new en...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er the problem will mitigate or not. Second, it is said that people of Tagus ...
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Line 5, column 74, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...of Tagus stapled millet nicely but that doesnt necessarily answer that question that w...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...reed of millet to resolve the problem. Finally, the government will be taking...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to ensure the problem to be solved. so, in conclusion we need to know some m...
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Line 9, column 3, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...o ensure the problem to be solved. so, in conclusion we need to know some mor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, really, second, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1230.0 2260.96107784 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 271.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53874538745 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29682789147 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 204.123752495 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49815498155 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 705.55239521 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3354529647 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.5 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5833333333 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294637084731 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107177069428 0.0743258471296 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647375921948 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160191926683 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751196984807 0.0628817314937 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.3550499002 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 12.5979740519 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 98.500998004 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.