Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
Medical science has become a bliss and curing flues with wonders. When there is a slight chance of curing people with inoculation it won't be wise to do nothing and wait for perish with grovel. So, before omitting the chance of inoculation against cow flu we need to know more data and relative information to evaluate.
Firstly, Since without inoculation people are dying anyway, it may be plausible to provide inoculation. Moreover, small possibility of death can't be ceded to big possibility of death. Therefore, we need the detailed result of numbers of people who may die as a result of inoculation and who may die as a result of flu.
Additionally, the inoculation result may differ person to person. We really don't know here how good or bad a person is going to react after inoculation. Vaccination may prove good to all the people where the disease is detected. They may end up reacting better than expected and ensures their survival. On the other hand, without vaccination they may never be able to survive. So people's reaction on the vaccination is a really important evidence which is essential to take a prudent decision.
Finally, when a flu is detected in one place there is a huge possibility of spreading. If requisite steps are not taken then it may spread overnight and result in mass decimation. If the flu has that chance then it is a must to provide inoculation to save myriad numbers compromising few. So, another important thing to know for taking decision is the ability of the flu that how quickly it can spread and decimate.
A flu can be as deadly as a natural disaster in a densely area. Expecting it to be cured by itself having an alternative, is not what should be expected. More evidence and results should be obtained before concluding so.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 311 350
No. of Characters: 1437 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.199 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.621 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.695 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.368 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.923 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.789 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.541 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 142, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...n. Moreover, small possibility of death cant be ceded to big possibility of death. T...
^^^^
Line 5, column 70, Rule ID: PRP_RB_NO_VB[1]
Message: Are you missing a verb?
... result may differ person to person. We really dont know here how good or bad a person is g...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... may differ person to person. We really dont know here how good or bad a person is g...
^^^^
Line 7, column 181, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...vernight and result in mass decimation. If the flu has that chance then it is a mu...
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Line 7, column 221, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...If the flu has that chance then it is a must to provide inoculation to save myriad numb...
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Line 9, column 49, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('densely') instead an adjective, or a noun ('area') instead of another adjective.
...n be as deadly as a natural disaster in a densely area. Expecting it to be cured by itself hav...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ould be obtained before concluding so.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, finally, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 309.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78317152104 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78206119193 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540453074434 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.3438704608 57.8364921388 40% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.7894736842 119.503703932 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2631578947 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84210526316 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28461542261 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823551274091 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589819103171 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145272078667 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576105238382 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 14.3799401198 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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