An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
For the proper functioning of the body, one should maintain the minimum vitamin levels. As vitamins help our most of body parts like eyes,skin,kidney and many more which plays vital role in body functioning.As The argument is about vitamin A deficiency in country Tagus and in viewing this problem International development organisation engineered a new breed of millet high in Vitamin A. The government of Tagus provided subsidy to farmers as their main crop might be millets. There are some serious considerations to be concerned inorder to battle the issue and make people of tagus to be free from deficiency.
First, Is millets are only source for Vitamin A in tagus country? In tagus country the main crop or majority of the crop may be millets and as it is a main crop for them, they might consume millet products. Through this intake of new highly vitamin A millet the people of Tagus facing deficiency might be cured and their vitamin levels be maintained. Also this high vitamin millets are costly, Government should provide the subsidy for the farmers who are growing the millet crop.
Second, In order to get the expected result the what are the government's plan? Sitting on one conclusion might not help in getting the expected results, the government should also work in other way of encouraging vitamin A rich fruits also. This may speed up the eradicating the impoverishment quickly.This may undermine the argument.
The organisation should also conduct a deep analysis how effective and efficient that new millet is. Because considering a simple experiment and concluding that this new variety seed will be high in Vitamin A, because long term research and effective predictive results are always good to the people and government to provide it to farmers.Also, the government should fund the organisation for research inorder to reduce the burden on people and might help the farmers in adopting the new variety of millets and quickly it goes to the consumers.
The government should also take care of marketing the newly produced millets to be sold to consumers under subsidy and make transparent to people to trust the new millets and consume it.
We should not rely completely on government people of Tagus should cooperate with government in implementing the new rules and new engineered millets.As mutual cooperation will achieve the predicted results much faster time than expected. The govt. should also consider the grievances from people for proper implementing and also researching on alternate solutions for the impoverishment in Tagus and also providing subsidy to farmers to make them viable.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 434 350
No. of Characters: 2161 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.564 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.979 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.725 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.759 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.372 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.372 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , skin
...ns help our most of body parts like eyes,skin,kidney and many more which plays vital ...
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Line 1, column 208, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...ch plays vital role in body functioning.As The argument is about vitamin A deficie...
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Line 2, column 351, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...and their vitamin levels be maintained. Also this high vitamin millets are costly, G...
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Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ay of encouraging vitamin A rich fruits also. This may speed up the eradicating the ...
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Line 3, column 302, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
... eradicating the impoverishment quickly.This may undermine the argument. The organi...
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Line 4, column 340, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...and government to provide it to farmers.Also, the government should fund the organis...
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Line 6, column 150, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...he new rules and new engineered millets.As mutual cooperation will achieve the pre...
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Line 6, column 150, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he new rules and new engineered millets.As mutual cooperation will achieve the pre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, may, second, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2200.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 428.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14018691589 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87193919902 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460280373832 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 689.4 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 99.3443210136 57.8364921388 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.5 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.75 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.75 5.70786347227 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411461538564 0.218282227539 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139309789964 0.0743258471296 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10413496984 0.0701772020484 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222184332914 0.128457276422 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115341976738 0.0628817314937 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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