International development organization came to a conclusion of farming a new breed of millet high in vitamin A without any convincing proofs. primarily, it isn't stated that all people in the Tagus have vitamin A deficiency. the new breed of millet might not have high content of vitamin A. farmers know the fact that millets are high vitamin A content they might not need a new breed to improve there vitamins.
The development organization stated that Tagus people are having vitamin deficiency and needed a new breed to increase their vitamins but it is also said that millet is a staple food in Tagus. if millets are in taken by people in Tagus still there are deficient in vitamin A then it makes the statement weak. in order to strengthen the statement the people of Tagus should add millets in their daily intake so that they will be efficient of vitamin a and no need for new breed of millets.
in order to get new type of millet people should take subsidies. farmers will be under debt to the government. millets are not the only way to get vitamins. intake of meat and eating healthy proper meal can also increase the vitamins. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. if millets are already available to the farmers and adding some portion of millet meal in their daily intake they don't need to adopt a new variety.
in the conclusion the international development organization failed to provide the actual reason for vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus so came to assumption that a new breed of millets might increase their vitamins. due to lack of knowledge about people of Tagus they failed to make a convincing case.
- People s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making 75
- An international development organization in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A While seeds for this new type of millet cost more farmers will be p 45
- GRE ISSUE When old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings 50
- Claim While boredom is often expressed with a sense of self satisfaction it should really be a source of embarrassment Reason Boredom arises from a lack of imagination and self motivation 50
- Claim While boredom is often expressed with a sense of self satisfaction it should really be a source of embarrassment Reason Boredom arises from a lack of imagination and self motivation 50
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 5 15
No. of Words: 302 350
No. of Characters: 1396 1500
No. of Different Words: 119 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.169 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.623 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.58 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 66 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 35 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 60.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.828 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.615 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.909 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.223 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 143, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Primarily
...itamin A without any convincing proofs. primarily, it isnt stated that all people in the ...
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Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...ut any convincing proofs. primarily, it isnt stated that all people in the Tagus hav...
^^^^
Line 1, column 225, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...in the Tagus have vitamin A deficiency. the new breed of millet might not have high...
^^^
Line 3, column 194, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... that millet is a staple food in Tagus. if millets are in taken by people in Tagus...
^^
Line 3, column 194, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... that millet is a staple food in Tagus. if millets are in taken by people in Tagus...
^^
Line 3, column 310, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...min A then it makes the statement weak. in order to strengthen the statement the p...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...nd no need for new breed of millets. in order to get new type of millet people ...
^^
Line 5, column 66, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Farmers
...of millet people should take subsidies. farmers will be under debt to the government. m...
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Line 5, column 112, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Millets
...s will be under debt to the government. millets are not the only way to get vitamins. i...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 158, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Intake
...s are not the only way to get vitamins. intake of meat and eating healthy proper meal ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 328, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ple will readily adopt the new variety. if millets are already available to the fa...
^^
Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... millet meal in their daily intake they dont need to adopt a new variety. in the ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...ey dont need to adopt a new variety. in the conclusion the international develo...
^^
Line 7, column 253, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Due
... millets might increase their vitamins. due to lack of knowledge about people of Ta...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 300.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74666666667 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63070755163 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 204.123752495 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 458.1 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2827683999 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9333333333 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.70786347227 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.52760607249 0.218282227539 242% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.206112649286 0.0743258471296 277% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112227878736 0.0701772020484 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.35425055101 0.128457276422 276% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624795299824 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 98.500998004 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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