"A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. Currently, the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, the proposed new jazz club in Monroe, the C-Note, would have the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popular in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer; several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe; and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight at 7 P.M. Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The developer’s application for a new Jazz club in Monroe is not comprehensive enough. The report makes several assumptions, basing its conclusion on illogical reasoning and unreliable facts, reflecting a dearth of detailed analysis.
Firstly, the group of developers make an assumption that setting up of a new Jazz club in Monroe will be a tremendously profitable enterprise. They however fail to shed light on the methods by which a Jazz club would become highly profitable. The application must have included a brief description of a business plan, with outlined profit margins. A survey of the residents of Monroe about their taste in music, besides tracking the footfall of Monroe residents in the nearest Jazz club, will provide a clearer picture whether Jazz club will indeed be a profitable venture. A demographic survey of all age groups will undoubtedly help to decide which category welcomes and is fond of Jazz music.
Secondly, the application wrongly assumes that the appearance of a hundred thousand people in the last annual jazz festival defines the parameters of popularity of Jazz music in Monroe. It may be that the annual jazz festival is the only big event occurring in the city; and moreover, it is unclear whether Monroe's residents, or people from other places attended the festival. In order to rightly assess the popularity of jazz music, the developers must undertake a study on the survey of the rising trends in music among Monroe's habitants, the average annual sale of the jazz music cds and the online sale of jazz music. Such detailed survey will be the perfect instrument to understand the future trends of popularity of jazz in Monroe.
Thirdly, Monroe being the home town to several well-known jazz players does not reflect that the residents have an inclination towards jazz music as it is nowhere mentioned whether these musicians perform in Monroe, or how popular they are among the people. Nevertheless, basing the application on the fact that the highest rated radio program "Jazz Nightly" is not conclusive enough. The developers should go an extra mile to find whether Jazz is as popular on televisions and in the internet media, as it is on radio. Finally, Monroe alone does not reflect the music habits of an entire nation. It may be possible that several other forms of music are as or even popular than Jazz. Had the developers provided a comparative study on the amount spend by music fans on various genres of entertainment, the argument would have been more cogent.
The developer’s application should thus be revised by incorporating detailed surveys and filling in the loopholes - only then should a loan be sanctioned.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 442 350
No. of Characters: 2188 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.585 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.95 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.729 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.051 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.352 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.352 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, firstly, however, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2249.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 442.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08823529412 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85650016102 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497737556561 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4097107202 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.944444444 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5555555556 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453132316166 0.218282227539 208% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150542032268 0.0743258471296 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926209179708 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234221498646 0.128457276422 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1208848424 0.0628817314937 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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