The argument is based on unwarranted facts and assumptions. Although it looks appealing in the first glance that, due to people having large interest in Jazz and Jazz club being 65 miles away from Monroe, it would be a tremendously profitable enterprise, but the argument is rife with holes and is flawed for numerous reasons. The argument fails to mention about the actual interest of the Monroe people and gives a general typical jazz fan spending. Furthermore, the argument provides vague information regarding the attendants at Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer.
Primarily, the argument cites that as thr nearest jazz club is 65 miles away from Monroe, and so if one of them opens in Monroe it would have all local market and would be a profitable business. The argument here assumes that most of the people of Monroe have great interest in Jazz and are ready to spend money for jazz music club. To support this assumption the argument provides vague information regarding the interest of Monroe people towards Jazz music by mentioning that 100,000 people attended Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer. The argument here provide no clear valid justified information regarding how many people actually from Monroe attended that festival. Had the argument has provided the lucid information about the actual numbers than it would have been easier to render a definite conclusion. Even then, getting information regarding the actual attendants, it could not be determined clearly about the actual interest of peole towards jazz club as they are different from festivals.
The argument assumes that as highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight at 7 P.M. than it would be profitable to open a Jazz club. The argument here provides no valid information regarding the income of neither the Monroe people nor their willingness to spend money on the Jazz cafe. May be most of the people loved listening to Jazz Nightly program on radio but they have no interest in going to Jazz cafes. Moreover even if most of them want to go to Jazz club but are they wealthy enough to afford going to Jazz club. The argument here provides no essential information about these essential parameters.
Furthermore, the argument cites that nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment so it would be a profitable business in Monroe to open Jazz club. The argument assumes that if nationwide jazz fans spend so much money than similarly Monoroe people would also spend that much money on Jazz. The argument here neglects the possibility that though Monroe people have great interest in Jazz music but they may be poor and not financially strong enough to afford going to Jazz clubs. The argument here also provide vague fact of the study that $1000 is spent by an individual on Jazz entertainment but no clear information is provided regarding their spending on Jazz clubs.
The conclusion of the argument rests on assumptions for which there is no valid evidence. Indeed, if these unstated assumptions fail to hold true then the argument completely falls apart. Hence the argument is unconvincing, flawed and open to debate.
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- "A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. Currently, the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, the proposed new jazz club in Monroe, the C-Note, would have the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popul 29
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 532 350
No. of Characters: 2646 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.803 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.974 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.582 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 107 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.183 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.682 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.426 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.426 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.189 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 39, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'thr the nearest'.
Suggestion: thr the nearest
... Primarily, the argument cites that as thr nearest jazz club is 65 miles away from Monroe,...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 448, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ave no interest in going to Jazz cafes. Moreover even if most of them want to go to Jazz...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 540, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to go'.
Suggestion: to go
...b but are they wealthy enough to afford going to Jazz club. The argument here provide...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 106, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...hat the typical jazz fan spends close to ,000 per year on jazz entertainment so it...
^^
Line 4, column 518, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to go'.
Suggestion: to go
...not financially strong enough to afford going to Jazz clubs. The argument here also p...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 539, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...g enough to afford going to Jazz clubs. The argument here also provide vague fact o...
^^^
Line 4, column 650, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t by an individual on Jazz entertainment but no clear information is provided reg...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...egarding their spending on Jazz clubs. The conclusion of the argument rests on ass...
^^^
Line 5, column 188, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...en the argument completely falls apart. Hence the argument is unconvincing, flawed an...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, similarly, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 16.3942115768 195% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2686.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 532.0 441.139720559 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04887218045 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63989020512 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.398496240602 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 823.5 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1861979395 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.090909091 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1818181818 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68181818182 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398412517933 0.218282227539 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152176570323 0.0743258471296 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132398445842 0.0701772020484 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259577519735 0.128457276422 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130228885006 0.0628817314937 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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