“Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculation against cow flu to be routinely administered.”
The author argues that the inoculation against cow flu should not be routinely administered, because people receiving the inoculation may risk a small possibility in causing undesired death, despite the potential effectiveness of the inoculation in saving people’s lives. At the first glance, the author’s argument seems to be somewhat convincing, but further reflection reveals that it is based on some dubious assumptions and faulty reasoning.
First of all, the author assumes that the inoculation against the cow flu would be much more dangerous than the disease, so that the medical practice should not be regularly administered. however, the author does not provide any evidence that clearly indicates the possibility of death resulted from either the inoculation or the cow flu. furthermore, we are not even sure how contagious the disease may be, if the government takes no measure to curb its spreading. it’s still probable that the disease may cause more death than what the inoculation could lead to. Besides, the vaccines can be improved with further medical research to lower its risk, which offers a better solution than just giving up the policy.
Second, the author supports his argument with vague words, such as “many lives” and “small possibility.” it seems that the author tries to cite some statistical evidence to make his/her statement more convincing. however, the author has failed to provide exact number that indicates how many people can be saved and how possible people will die due to the inoculation. The author should resort to some medical research data or governmental publication to reinforce his/her argument with an authoritative voice. furthermore, the demographic group more susceptible to the danger of the inoculation is supposed to be specified in order to speculate whether the threat posed by the inoculation will affect a large population and how it can be avoided. Therefore, the author should use more statistical evidence to shed lights on his/her argument
In conclusion, the author’s argument is not well reasoned because it rests on questionable assumptions and does not have strong enough evidence to support it. The author assumes that taking the inoculation will create more problems and harm people’s lives even more and also forgets to provide exact number to avoid vagueness when he/she tries to address this issue with a statistical sense.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 1975 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.13 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.771 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 38.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.477 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.456 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.672 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.239 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...e should not be regularly administered. however, the author does not provide any eviden...
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Line 5, column 340, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
... either the inoculation or the cow flu. furthermore, we are not even sure how contagious th...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 467, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It&apos
...takes no measure to curb its spreading. it's still probable that the disease may c...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 234, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...make his/her statement more convincing. however, the author has failed to provide exact...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 532, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
...r argument with an authoritative voice. furthermore, the demographic group more susceptible...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2086.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 381.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4750656168 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02472457298 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535433070866 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.5529379191 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.461538462 119.503703932 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3076923077 23.324526521 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.70786347227 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252563363502 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0994571881213 0.0743258471296 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760603447355 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164066117129 0.128457276422 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558364183453 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 14.3799401198 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.1 12.5979740519 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 12.3882235529 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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