Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
The argument here provides two contarary statements about the routine inoculation against cow flu in the area where the disease is detected. The use of the word 'however' suggests that the writer of the argument though admit the requirement of the inoculation, does not support the action because of the logic he may consider reasonable. However, the reason provided behind his stand is flawed and is based on assumptions which doesn't have sufficient evidence.
In the first sentence the writer have already admitted that many lives might be saved if the routine inoculations were administered, this statement suggests that the disease is fatal and has caused many lives in past. Considering this fact, the satement which says that there is a small posiibility that a person will die as a result of inoculations, it seems that probability of death caused by inoculation is considerably lesser than the death caused by cow-flu.
However, it seems that possibility of death through rutine inoculation may be caused by the side effect of the same. Thus, the writer of the statememnt is completly ignoring the the treatment which may prevent such side effects to take place from the begining. As for example, Certain drugs can cause allergic reation in some patients but for that as precautoins the are given pre-med to treat the subside the reaction in advance before it occures. Moreover, the writer is also ignoring the possibility of providing provisions, to such people who has received inoculation, through which they will be monitered by medicle team and will be treated immdiately if something goes wrong. It can be like people receiving remicade inffusion, are normally asked to get their blood work checked to see if any harm to the liver has been caused or not.
Lastly, the writer is saying that there is a small possibility of death caused by the inculation but he doesn't specify that which kind of innoculation it is. There is a possibility that the innoculation against cow flu is actually completely safe to administer routinely. And it might be other kind of inoculation which is harmfull to administer routinely. In this case writer need to be precise about the type of inoculation he is talking about.
Thus, I feel that the argument against the administration of routin innoculations against cow flu to the people of the disease affected area is flawed and needs more facts and evidence to validate its point.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 406 350
No. of Characters: 1987 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.489 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.894 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.755 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.152 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.933 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.342 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.59 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 427, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...lawed and is based on assumptions which doesnt have sufficient evidence. In the f...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 210, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...ease is fatal and has caused many lives in past. Considering this fact, the satement wh...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 175, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...of the statememnt is completly ignoring the the treatment which may prevent such side e...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 175, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...of the statememnt is completly ignoring the the treatment which may prevent such side e...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 364, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...me patients but for that as precautoins the are given pre-med to treat the subside the ...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 395, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...cautoins the are given pre-med to treat the subside the reaction in advance before it occur...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 105, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...f death caused by the inculation but he doesnt specify that which kind of innoculation...
^^^^^^
Line 17, column 209, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cts and evidence to validate its point.
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, so, thus, as for, for example, i feel, kind of, talking about, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2046.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 404.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06435643564 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81788857654 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507425742574 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6852314297 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.4 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9333333333 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.2 5.70786347227 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333211207912 0.218282227539 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105812125769 0.0743258471296 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0864256707254 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180197898035 0.128457276422 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664925424525 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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