Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
In the argument above, the author is suggesting inoculations cannot be used due to the fact that there is a small possibility one may die after the administration. I find such argument is not logically convicting since the author is lacking the evidence to support his or hers argument and reach conclusion based on too many unproved assumptions.
some may argue that if someone really died because of the inoculations, then we are basically murdering people, and that is why we cannot release the inoculations until is 100 percent safe and sound. However, I think the potential benefits for the inoculations are totally outweighed the “small possibility” of side effects. first of all, author did not provide sufficient statistical evidences to support the conclusion that how small of the possibility that a person will die from the administration. is it 1 in 100 people would suffer death as a consequence or 1 in 100,000? As a result, we cannot assess the inoculation accurately, thereby do not have enough information to conclude whether the inoculation should or should not be released to the public.
Moreover, In today’s medical world, numerous new drugs have been developed every day and none of them are perfect, so to speak. At the same time, all these imperfect drugs have approved by FDA for the same reason – the benefits of the drug is way more important to us. Not to mention, the disease we are talking about here is cow flu, which is deadly and at the same time, extremely contagious. since, the author did not mention if there were alternative method to treat cow flu. if we cannot release the inoculations for the people who needed them. many more people will die from the disease itself. While when they carry the disease, some of them may travel to different places for any reason. we are risking a potential worldly spread for something was totally preventable in the first place.
Another aspect that author failed to disclose is why the inoculations need to be routinely administered. is the quality of the inoculation is not good enough yet? is this inoculation just a temporary one? if the inoculation was just a temporary solution indeed, is that the cause of a small possibility of death? we also do not know how often the inoculations should be routinely administered, and how many time should one be administered in total? if one needs to be administered once a week in order for the inoculation to be effective, then obviously it would increase the chance of death statistically speaking.
With so many unanswered questions, I cannot take the same position as the author did. I believe the argument will be significantly strengthen if author introduced some statistical data to support his or hers conclusion. such as data that relate to the percentage of people who are died due to the inoculation. new advancements in the medical field have saved millions of lives, but without sounding evidence to support the theories or new drugs, in medical world would fall into chaos. that is why I have to suggest that the author does not have enough evidence to support his or hers argument above, thereby invalid.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 533 350
No. of Characters: 2550 1500
No. of Different Words: 233 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.805 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.784 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.825 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 174 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 66 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 38.071 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.455 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.6 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.178 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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In the argument above, the author is sug...
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...sed on too many unproved assumptions. some may argue that if someone really di...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Some
... on too many unproved assumptions. some may argue that if someone really died b...
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Line 4, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
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...any unproved assumptions. some may argue that if someone really died because of ...
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Suggestion: First
...mall possibility' of side effects. first of all, author did not provide sufficie...
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...erson will die from the administration. is it 1 in 100 people would suffer death a...
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...should not be released to the public. Moreover, In today's medical world,...
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...at the same time, extremely contagious. since, the author did not mention if there we...
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Suggestion: If
...re alternative method to treat cow flu. if we cannot release the inoculations for ...
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...lations for the people who needed them. many more people will die from the disease i...
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Suggestion: We
...vel to different places for any reason. we are risking a potential worldly spread ...
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...otally preventable in the first place. Another aspect that author failed to dis...
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...ions need to be routinely administered. is the quality of the inoculation is not g...
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Suggestion: Is
...the inoculation is not good enough yet? is this inoculation just a temporary one? ...
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Suggestion: If
... this inoculation just a temporary one? if the inoculation was just a temporary so...
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... cause of a small possibility of death? we also do not know how often the inoculat...
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...me should one be administered in total? if one needs to be administered once a wee...
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...ance of death statistically speaking. With so many unanswered questions, I can...
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...data to support his or hers conclusion. such as data that relate to the percentage o...
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...le who are died due to the inoculation. new advancements in the medical field have ...
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Suggestion: That
...in medical world would fall into chaos. that is why I have to suggest that the autho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, then, while, as to, i think, such as, talking about, as a result, first of all, so to speak, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2639.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 534.0 441.139720559 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94194756554 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95982121053 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 204.123752495 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470037453184 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 857.7 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9129888725 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.5 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5384615385 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292054333054 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778112408596 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552118972815 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152901753986 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563971590219 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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