“Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora’s citizens meet the current standards
for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of
Corpora’s citizens met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken
when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline
in fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of
computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made
citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year’s unusually low expenditures on
fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely
the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does.”
The argument states the following facts but does not provide sufficient information to justify them.
1) The number of people meet the fitness standards has decline between now and 20 years ago based on the standards at that time
2) The computes have not made people less physically fit
3) There is a decline in the expenditures on fitness related products and services. If the economy impoves the fitness levels also increase.
Firstly, It is not fair to come to a conclusion based on different standards. If the standards defined twenty years back are different from the current standards then the analysis is wrong. As time changes, the economical and social situations of the society changes as well. But the argument does not give what aspects of the current standards have changes. It may happen that with the previous standards their may be more than one-half of the people physically fit.
Secondly, The places where the computer ownership is highest may more people going to fitness centers and their fitness levels may be more, but we can't argue all these people with high fitness levels have computers. To illustrate, if there is a gym in the street where there is a high concentration of people who owns computer, but if the people who does not have computer only goes to the gym. And if there are no people in the next street is going to the gym then we will get a false assumption that the places with highest computer ownership are comparatively fit. Though, from the previous statements it is evident that is is not true.
Physical fitness can be achieved with out spending much money. People can daily go to jogging, walking, yoga and etcetra to improve their fitness. However, the argument states the the low expense on the fitness related products is due to economic slowdown but may also happen that the expenditure on the fitness products reduced not due to economy but due to different other awareness of other aspects. Like, people found they don't need a thread-mill to do jogging or running instead they can go to park and run. Even if the economy improves there is no statement in the current argument provides any evidence to prove that people spend money on fitness related products.
From the above analysis it is clear that the reason for reduction in the physical fitness crowd is not due to economic slowdown or computers. But it can be due to some other factors like people's choice to use less expensive methods or use the free fitness services available on the internet. So, unless more information about the changes in the fitness standards, population densities of people with and without computers in the different parts in the city where it was found to have high fitness levels we can not come to conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 475 350
No. of Characters: 2235 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.668 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.705 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.497 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.591 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.111 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.618 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 84, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... fitness related products and services. If the economy impoves the fitness levels ...
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Line 11, column 79, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...onclusion based on different standards. If the standards defined twenty years back...
^^
Line 15, column 51, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the highest'.
Suggestion: is the highest
...The places where the computer ownership is highest may more people going to fitness center...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 15, column 148, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...heir fitness levels may be more, but we cant argue all these people with high fitnes...
^^^^
Line 15, column 514, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the highest'.
Suggestion: with the highest
... get a false assumption that the places with highest computer ownership are comparatively fi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 15, column 569, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mputer ownership are comparatively fit. Though, from the previous statements it is evi...
^^^^^^
Line 15, column 625, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: is
... previous statements it is evident that is is not true. Physical fitness can be ...
^^^^^
Line 19, column 34, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
.... Physical fitness can be achieved with out spending much money. People can daily g...
^^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 177, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...r fitness. However, the argument states the the low expense on the fitness related prod...
^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 177, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...r fitness. However, the argument states the the low expense on the fitness related prod...
^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 428, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... other aspects. Like, people found they dont need a thread-mill to do jogging or run...
^^^^
Line 19, column 514, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ng instead they can go to park and run. Even if the economy improves there is no statem...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2298.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 474.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84810126582 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5481607938 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443037974684 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 710.1 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.9640477495 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.9 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0736702428261 0.218282227539 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0284433976674 0.0743258471296 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378928186818 0.0701772020484 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0419656851256 0.128457276422 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047025704692 0.0628817314937 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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