Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora's citizens met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author of the passage talks about the fitness level of corpora’s citizens. The author in his argument makes a number of assumption which he believes could have led to the decline of number of fit people in the area.
Firstly, the author states that the number of fit people in the region has dropped from ½ to 1/4th.But the argument doesn’t speak about immigration. It very well could be the case where people with poor health could have migrated into the country. It could also be the case where physical fit people could have left the country.
The author also states that the experts are wrong with their assumption of considering time spent on using computers being the reason behind the drop in health. He backs his claim by stating that the fitness levels are high in the region where computer ownership levels are high. Now computer ownership does not necessarily mean high computer usage. People in the region owning computers might not necessarily be using it as much.
The author then states that the decline in usage of fitness products is the reason why there has been a sudden drop in fitness levels and he ties the low expenditure on these products to the poor economy. Low expenditure on fitness products could not necessarily be because of bad economy. It could be because of lack of awareness of these products among the people of that region and also the author directly correlates fitness to the use of fitness products. Using fitness products is not necessarily the only way to stay fit.
So to sum it up the author has made a couple of assumption’s in the argument and has right out jumped to conclusion’s. the author has failed to provide necessary evidence on various occasions in the argument. Which inturn seriously weakened his conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 308 350
No. of Characters: 1439 1500
No. of Different Words: 140 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.189 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.672 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.419 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 66 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.533 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.591 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.376 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.64 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.203 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 99, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
... the region has dropped from ½ to 1/4th.But the argument doesn't speak about i...
^^^
Line 5, column 129, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... right out jumped to conclusion's. the author has failed to provide necessary ...
^^^
Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e on various occasions in the argument. Which inturn seriously weakened his conclusio...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 306.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87254901961 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68690457442 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 204.123752495 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447712418301 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8962684129 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1875 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5625 5.70786347227 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0272116386771 0.218282227539 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0112948563499 0.0743258471296 15% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0162692389842 0.0701772020484 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0155987455689 0.128457276422 12% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0103089143995 0.0628817314937 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 98.500998004 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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