"The Mozart School of Music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. First of all, the Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels; there is no audition to attend the school. Second, the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well a wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock. Third, the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area. Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
According to the web site of the Mozart School of Music, the guardians would like to prefer the Mozart School as their first choice. The writer makes this conclusion based on the teaching style and the success of the previous graduates of the Mozart School. Although at a first glance, the recommendation seems plausible, it is based on three specific unwarranted assumptions. Therefore, before accepting the claim of the web site, these assumptions need to be evaluated and justified. Else, we may conclude that the argument as a whole is flawed and thus can't be accepted.
To begin, it has been assumed that parents will like the idea of the Mozart school to welcome new learners from different ages and capabilities. However, it may be the opposite; the parents are not willing to send their kids to learn music to an institution where there are no requirements or criteria to fulfill. Perhaps, the guardians are preferring a school which is more rigid in admitting students such as having the basic skills to play guitar or piano or other instruments. Besides, many children may have rudimentary education on music. If they are admitted to a class with freshers whom don't have any exposures to music, they may not like Mozart school any more. If any of the preceding circumstances becomes true, the argument will hold no water.
Secondly, it has been assumed that the parents will prioritize Mozart School over others because of their lessons on almost every musical instruments. However, it may be possible that the guardians don't like to make their children jack of all trade. Some children may incline to learn jazz music while others hip-hop or classical instruments. Perhaps some prefer modern neoclassical instruments over others. It is strongly possible that when these children and their parents discover that Mozart school forces all the students to learn all types of musical instruments, they may be no longer interested to send their children to Mozart School. If any of the above mentioned points becomes true, the argument of the prompt will be seriously weakened.
Last but not the least, it is assumed that parents will be more passionate about admitting their children to Mozart because of some adept musician faculty members. It may be possible that Mozart school recruits expert musicians for some particular instruments, whereas the rest of the instruments are instructed by novice and inexperienced instructors. Therefore, parents who want to teach those instruments are no longer eager to send their kids to Mozart school. It is also possible that many students feel uncomfortable to learn from the expert musicians because of the obscurities in their teaching methods. Hence, recruiting expert musicians for some particular instruments may not be attractive at all. If any of the aforementioned points is true, the conclusion of the writer will be seriously undermined.
To summarize, the claim of the Mozart School is riffed with many logical fallacies. Without properly examining the assumptions that are illustrated in my writing, it would be inappropriate to vie with the conclusion of the Web site.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 513 350
No. of Characters: 2569 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.759 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.008 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.757 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 189 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 137 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 102 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.52 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.836 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: WEB_SITE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: website
According to the web site of the Mozart School of Music, the guar...
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Line 1, column 423, Rule ID: WEB_SITE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: website
...fore, before accepting the claim of the web site, these assumptions need to be evaluated...
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Line 1, column 557, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... argument as a whole is flawed and thus cant be accepted. To begin, it has been a...
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Line 3, column 338, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...eria to fulfill. Perhaps, the guardians are preferring a school which is more rigid in admitti...
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Line 3, column 597, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... admitted to a class with freshers whom dont have any exposures to music, they may n...
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Line 5, column 199, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
..., it may be possible that the guardians dont like to make their children jack of all...
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Line 5, column 286, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to jazz'
Suggestion: to jazz
...ade. Some children may incline to learn jazz music while others hip-hop or classical...
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Line 9, column 224, Rule ID: WEB_SITE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: Website
...riate to vie with the conclusion of the Web site.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2634.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 511.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15459882583 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83593042388 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444227005871 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 802.8 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7793112057 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.36 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.44 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.56 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360397184602 0.218282227539 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104231680594 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922961946157 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209525074159 0.128457276422 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641223882682 0.0628817314937 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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