Muscle Monthly, a fitness magazine that regularly features pictures of
bodybuilders using state-of-the-art exercise machines, frequently sells out,
according to the owner of Sky view Newsstand. To help maximize fitness levels
in our town’s residents, we should, therefore, equip our new community fitness
center with such machines.”
In this argument the author concludes that the new fitness community should be equipped by the latest released fitness machines in order to raise the level of fitness among residents. He gives credence to this conclusion by indicating that the level of sale of the muscle magazine has been maximized by advertising state of the art fitness machines with the pictures of bodybuilders. This conclusion is problematic for three critical reasons.
First, the author uses some irrelevant evidence for concluding his argument. He believes that the increase in the level of muscle magazine circulation is a relevant issue for resulting that the fitness community is in the need of new and advanced equipment for the citizens and the budget of the city should be allocated for these facilities. Although these events might come after each other, there is no causal relationship between them.
In addition, if we considered the rise of magazine sale the relevant issue in residents’ point of interest, it could not be concluded that they need the new equipment for exercising. In fact there are some other factors which could influence this event. For example, people like the reading and watching the pictures of the bodybuilders and related issues in this magazine while they do not want to exercise themselves with the equipments in the pictures.
The last critical point is the ambiguous and vague picture of the population of this city. The argument lacks the information about the attributes of the residents such as gender, age, education or even their jobs. These are vital factors in deciding for this issue. If all residents are middle-aged, the equipments of the fitness community would not be so important for them. In fact they all tend to do exercise for the aim of health and not for the aim of building their body like theses bodybuilders.
In conclusion, the author’s chain of reasoning is not convincing. To strengthen the claim the author should provide evidences in three 3 different aspects which are mentioned above. He should use some supporting evidences in regards to the causal relationship between the sale volumes of the magazine and equipping the fitness community. Moreover, indicating the various attributes of the population of the city helps the author in order to persuade the readers of the argument.
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| 2016-11-04 | s.raei@sep | 50 | view |
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- Muscle Monthly, a fitness magazine that regularly features pictures ofbodybuilders using state-of-the-art exercise machines, frequently sells out,according to the owner of Sky view Newsstand. To help maximize fitness levelsin our town’s residents, we sh 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 316, Rule ID: STATE_OF_THE_ART[1]
Message: Did you mean 'state-of-the-art'?
Suggestion: state-of-the-art
...azine has been maximized by advertising state of the art fitness machines with the pictures of b...
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Line 5, column 229, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...He should use some supporting evidences in regards to the causal relationship between the sal...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...persuade the readers of the argument.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, so, then, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1962.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 383.0 441.139720559 87% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1227154047 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83018122411 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472584856397 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6369276775 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2777777778 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142555488435 0.218282227539 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448452529191 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509849451972 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0869401656141 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516329945338 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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