Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly, Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
Nature’s Way, a store which sells health food and other health-related products, is set to open in the town of Plainville. The franchise owner expects the store to be profitable and successful. This conclusion of the author is based on the fact that Nature’s Way has always proved to be lucrative in residential areas comprising of people living a healthy lifestyle. Before evaluating the soundness of this conclusion, one must consider the unstated assumptions made by the author. Thus, the following four questions must be answered.
First, can we predict the sales statistics based on a report of previously done sales? In other words, can we assure that an “all-time high” sales report going to follow growth in profits? The author is maybe trying to extrapolate the sales statistics of the future based on the present data. Perhaps the sales in future, after the opening of Nature’s Way, might decline. For example, it is possible that residents of Plainsville gradually becomes sufficiently healthy and in turn, they won’t be needing such health foods and other products. If the above scenario becomes true, then the assertion made by the author considerably weakens.
Second, does this statistics for local health club covers for every age group or does it just focuses on a specific age group of the population? By mentioning “more members”, the author is probably trying to assert that every type of age groups are involved in such healthy activities. It is possible that residents from age twenty to thirty only engage in activities such as weight training and aerobics classes. If this is true, then people who do not belong to the age group of twenty to thirty might not purchase health-related products from Nature’s Way store. Therefore, this plausible example, if true, might significantly attack the conclusion made by the author.
Third, stating that school children are “required” to engage in fitness activities, questions an individual kid’s liberty that is, whether he or she is interested or not. For example, suppose a child who is fascinated by indoor sports activities might not find physical exercise interesting and enforcing it upon them might lead problems which perhaps will reduce the interest of others in such physical activities. If this becomes true, the number of children engaging in a healthy lifestyle will reduce and hence it will strongly oppose the author’s conclusion.
Finally, the author assumes that children who are made to engage in physical activity in their school life will continue such lifestyle forever. Perhaps, the children are following these physical activities as a school routine. For example, suppose a child who was involved in physical activity in his or her school life, might become a lethargic and torpor child in future. If this example becomes true, the author’s assertion about these school children as a “new generation of potential customer” will be largely weakened.
In conclusion, proposed argument, as it stands now, is significantly flawed due to its dependency on several unsuitable assumptions. The author is, therefore, requested for providing more appropriate and logical evidence in order to make their argument valid. If the author accounts the above three questions, it will be possible to fully evaluate the validity of the argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 535 350
No. of Characters: 2714 1500
No. of Different Words: 244 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.809 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.073 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.701 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 216 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 158 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 118 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.577 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.482 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.282 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.282 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 320, Rule ID: COMPRISING_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprising' or 'consisting of'?
Suggestion: comprising; consisting of
...ed to be lucrative in residential areas comprising of people living a healthy lifestyle. Befo...
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Line 2, column 311, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... on the present data. Perhaps the sales in future, after the opening of Nature’s Way, mig...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 493, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ciently healthy and in turn, they won’t be needing such health foods and other products. I...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...or considerably weakens. Second, does this statistics for local health club covers...
^^^^
Line 5, column 365, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ght become a lethargic and torpor child in future. If this example becomes true, the auth...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, third, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2821.0 2260.96107784 125% => OK
No of words: 534.0 441.139720559 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28277153558 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85995523358 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 204.123752495 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485018726592 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 872.1 705.55239521 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7656039114 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.5 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5384615385 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80769230769 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196419929451 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608578861423 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101896192632 0.0701772020484 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109697143922 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134289052007 0.0628817314937 214% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 98.500998004 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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