Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
The argument topic has pointed out that Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling healthy food and other products, is opening in the Plainsville. It is needed to prove that successful business of healthy food and other product. Author provides several instances of poor reasoning and ill defined terminologies. He defines the selling nature of the Plainsville and the describes the general activities, related to the health; however, there is not explained the correlation between activities and the profit of the business. Hence given argument is incomplete.
First of all, author argues that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all time high. He does not say anything about the Plainsville citizens. Who are buying the these products? And why? Perhaps Plainsville is the tourist area.Perhaps only major season is appropriate for the running shoes and cloths. How this assumption determine profit for Nature's Way, stock business.
Secondly, Author claims that weight losing and aerobics class of the Plainsville are always full. This is completely ridiculous assumption. If people are concerned about the health aerobics classes are unnecessary. Obese are generally occur since the lack of exercise and lack of health knowledge. Probity is not occur the health concerned areas. I think Plainsville is such the same area, people are not conscious about the health.
Finally, the third and still weak assumption is that children is the potential customer of this program. This is totally uncertain thing, we can give the guarantee about this evidence. Only author can guess about this assumption. There is not necessary to take the venture. In order to get the profit from this health related business other careful research can be done. They can take the fresh views fro the peoples.
To recapitulate, careful scrutiny shows that author provides little credible support for the conclusion. To get the success, it is needed to do fresh research about the public opinion, only after then author can draw the useful conclusion; that will be successful.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 522, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ivities and the profit of the business. Hence given argument is incomplete. First of...
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Line 2, column 241, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Perhaps
...Perhaps Plainsville is the tourist area.Perhaps only major season is appropriate for th...
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Line 3, column 140, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...is is completely ridiculous assumption. If people are concerned about the health a...
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Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'occurred'.
Suggestion: occurred
...es are unnecessary. Obese are generally occur since the lack of exercise and lack of ...
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Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'occurred'.
Suggestion: occurred
...ack of health knowledge. Probity is not occur the health concerned areas. I think Pla...
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Line 4, column 402, Rule ID: FOR_FRO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'for'?
Suggestion: for
... be done. They can take the fresh views fro the peoples. To recapitulate, careful ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, i think, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 330.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26363636364 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6990951788 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542424242424 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.8473053892 57% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.4215430403 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.375 119.503703932 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.75 23.324526521 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20062674926 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472070532116 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765107227353 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101911869353 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837324421922 0.0628817314937 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.3799401198 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.1389221557 65% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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