One recent research study has indicated that many adolescents need more sleep than they are getting, and another study has shown that many high school students in our city are actually dissatisfied with their own academic performance. As a way of combating these problems, the high schools in our city should begin classes at 8:30 A.M. instead of 7:30 A.M., and end the school day an hour later. This arrangement will give students an extra hour of sleep in the morning, thereby making them more alert and more productive. Consequently, the students will perform better on tests and other assignments, and their academic skills will improve significantly.
The need to have a sound sleep is paramount for all human beings as it helps i completing the day's body cycle with utmost efficiency and bringing it to full charge for the next day. The argument that shifting the school hours by one hour late would increase the academic skills of the students is flawed for a number of reasons. Below are a few which describe how changing the school schedule might not result in improving the academic skills significantly.
The first and the foremost flaw is that the argument fails to state the situation of the schools in the city. They need to consider the courses that are imparted inn these schools, whether there is appropriate faculty to impart the necessary education to the students. The infrastructure of the schools in the city need to be validated. The schools of the city may be lacking on these fronts as a result of which the students would have no zeal at the academic front. A revisit to the course curriculum of these schools need to be undertaken to verify if they are lagging on these fronts.
The duration for which the school functions needs to be talked about. If the school hours are significantly long, no matter what time you start the day it would not help in making the students productive. They would still have to give the same number of hours during a day which might be the reason that would be wearing them out, hence a decline in the performance at tests. The long hours may itself be a burden to the students.
Consequently, a study on the students population has not been done. The students in the city may be less inclined to an academic career. Their areas of interest may be more towards sports and other extracurricular activities and they may be focussing more on such fields. Investing time in such areas might not give a student the necessary bandwidth to focus on the academic performance. Also, if students in the city look out more for such careers, the training schedules may be such tat it consumes all of their time and energy, hence less focus on the academics.
The above mentioned reasons help in justifying to some extent the dissatisfaction among students for their performance. These need to be considering for developing a plan that can help students focus on their academic skills as well.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 402 350
No. of Characters: 1851 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.478 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.604 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.587 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.158 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.286 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: I_AM[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I am'?
Suggestion: I am
...amount for all human beings as it helps i completing the days body cycle with utm...
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Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to complete' or 'complete'.
Suggestion: to complete; complete
...ount for all human beings as it helps i completing the days body cycle with utmost efficie...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 469, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...uld have no zeal at the academic front. A revisit to the course curriculum of these schoo...
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Line 3, column 590, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fy if they are lagging on these fronts. The duration for which the school functi...
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Line 7, column 30, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...udents. Consequently, a study on the students population has not been done. The stude...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, hence, if, look, may, so, still, well, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1894.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 402.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71144278607 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65294979603 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462686567164 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1118778789 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6842105263 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1578947368 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05263157895 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179108508038 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674890996047 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0315864464618 0.0701772020484 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10648633973 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326921538648 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.3550499002 139% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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