In order to relieve Briggsville’s notorious traffic congestion, Mayor Harrison Smith Jones plans to build a multi-million dollar subway system. The subway will run through the major downtown areas, a part of the town where buses serve as the only form of public transportation. For years, residents have been complaining both about inconsistent buses, and the general lack of safety while riding the buses. Additionally, the subway will be running twenty-four hours a day. Since motorists will spend less time in traffic, Mayor Harrison Smith Jones expects to see an immediate increase in worker productivity, which will improve the economy of Briggsville
The argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based upon the fact that if subway system is installed, it will provide remedy for the traffic congestion in the city of Briggsville. But the argument of the author is not cogent becasue of some unwarranted assumptions.
The arguments assumes that subway system running through the major downtown areas, where buses sreve as the only form of public transportation, will reduce the traffic congestion. But it may be true that the major congestion are usually not at the major downtowns because of the buses. It may happen that as a center of economy of the country a large number of business and commercial trucks passes through the downtowns causing a serious congestion. In order to remove congestion the city should provide a bypass system for those vehicles. However, it may be also true that the congestions never happen in the downtowns but occur in suburban areas because large number of factories in the city are located their. People going to the factories uses private cars and those cars cause the traffic congestion. So, in order to conclude that the propsed subway will remove traffic cngestion, the exact location of the congestion and the vehicle types of the locations must be clearly explained.
However, it is also possible that the subway because it is running thorugh the major downtowns is following a rounabout path for most of the passengers using it hence requiring more times comapred to the time they spend in traffic congestion. If it is true then the subway will not provide the purpose for which it has been proposed. Had the argument exlicitly explained about the path and placed evidence that the subway will not follow a roundabout path in order to catch every major downtowns then the argument will be more persuasive.
The argument unwarrantedly assumes that production of a company is solely dependent on the time length workers spend in the office. Productivity largely depends on the working environment of the company. It may happen that the ventilation system, internet system, heating system of the company are not good and the workers suffer a lot which reduces the productivity. It is also possible that the company does not provide any recess during work and for this in the later part of the day the workers become tierd and their average productvity is hampered.
Again it may happen that the city economy is not improving becasue of some unwarranted business policiy and without solving those problems only removing traffic congestion is not going to improve the economy.
The argument is not cogent becasue of some unwarranted assumptions.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 441 350
No. of Characters: 2183 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.583 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.95 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.589 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.211 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.395 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.342 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.6 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 15, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'assume'.
Suggestion: assume
...nwarranted assumptions. The arguments assumes that subway system running through the ...
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Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...t as a center of economy of the country a large number of business and commercial trucks passes t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 441.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04988662132 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68230486434 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.430839002268 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 705.6 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2793961106 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.210526316 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2105263158 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.94736842105 5.70786347227 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232210361421 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729479216029 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921490192494 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0968329193164 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0867326060429 0.0628817314937 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.