The store owner concludes that the deteriorating business in Central Plaza is due to the increase in litter and vandalism within the plaza, resulting from the increased skateboard users within the premise. However, the author’s argument is full of assumptions without any evidence to prove its point.
In order to validate the author’s claim, the first question needed to be asked is whether the decreased number of shoppers in Central Plaza was really a consequence of the increased skateboarders. It could be that during the past 2 years there is a declining economy and therefore shoppers were spending less and saving more. Moreover, there is no mention of shop prices. There could be an overall increase in store prices in Central Plaza, therefore leading to shoppers switching to a new place and hence the decreased in business. If any of these were the case then it would undermine the authors claim that that the decline in business was due to skateboarders, and thus prohibiting skateboarding would not solve the problem.
Furthermore, the author assumes that the increase in litter and vandalism within the plaza was due to skateboarders, and this added fact also explains the decrease in Central Plaza shoppers. However, the author fails to provide any hard evidence that this increase was actually due to skateboarders within the plaza. The litter could have been caused by regular shoppers and not skateboards themselves. If proven true, banning skateboarders would not be of any help to the store owners. The argument provided by the author fails to answer the question whether skateboarders in Central Plaza are customers themselves? If yes, then banning skateboarders would further decrease business in the plaza.
Overall, the author’s proposition to questions ban skateboarders would not improve their business if all the problems the author suggested was not due to skateboarders in the first place. The author needs to first answer the mentioned above in order to validate his claims.
- "Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the numb 50
- Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed. 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 611, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...en it would undermine the authors claim that that the decline in business was due to skat...
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Line 5, column 540, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
... provided by the author fails to answer the question whether skateboarders in Central Plaza are cust...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'in the first place']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.265193370166 0.25644967241 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.157458563536 0.15541462614 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0552486187845 0.0836205057962 66% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0580110497238 0.0520304965353 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0193370165746 0.0272364105082 71% => OK
Prepositions: 0.116022099448 0.125424944231 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0524861878453 0.0416121511921 126% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.96714622388 2.79052419416 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0441988950276 0.026700313972 166% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.129834254144 0.113004496875 115% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0220994475138 0.0255425247493 87% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0 0.0127820249294 0% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2028.0 2731.13054187 74% => OK
No of words: 323.0 446.07635468 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.2786377709 6.12365571057 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.57801047555 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.396284829721 0.378187486979 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.306501547988 0.287650121315 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.232198142415 0.208842608468 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.133126934985 0.135150697306 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96714622388 2.79052419416 106% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 207.018472906 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461300309598 0.469332199767 98% => OK
Word variations: 45.9729716537 52.1807786196 88% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.039408867 75% => OK
Sentence length: 21.5333333333 23.2022227129 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4764239456 57.7814097925 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.2 141.986410481 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5333333333 23.2022227129 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.933333333333 0.724660767414 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 52.1834881321 51.9672348444 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.84705882353 1.8405768891 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.585129596784 0.441005458295 133% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.15399587968 0.135418324435 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0937049233924 0.0829849096947 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.608077509574 0.58762219726 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.17888316343 0.147661913831 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.280233715511 0.193483328276 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125842111419 0.0970749176394 130% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.560775652572 0.42659136922 131% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.03075783027 0.0774707102158 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.460459799256 0.312017818177 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722994128597 0.0698173142475 104% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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