It seems to be logical, at the first glance, to agree with the decreasing the number of shoppers due to increasing the popularity of skateboarding. However, the author of this argument relies on a couple of less credible evidence or even doubtful assumption to consolidate his stance. In what fallows, I will elaborate on them in details.
The first problem with the argument is that the writer refers to a survey but does not specify the size of target population. In the argument is mentioned “many Central Plaza store owners” but did not mention the number of them and this target sample is what percent of Central Plaza store owners. It can be possible they have a small group that is not satisfied with the skateboarding, at all. According to statistical theories, the greater the population of sample to target size, the more reliable results are. Thus, the first piece of evidence we need to know more about, then analyze, is specifying the number of surveyors who represent all Central Plaza store owners.
The second problem with the argument is that it concludes on a weak analogy. The author did not attention to the fact that this decreasing might have another reasons; this state had stagnation in these years and people are not potent enough to come this Center, or even other Center that built near Plaza Center which is more beautiful with the logical price that affected these Center shoppers. In order to better assess the argument, we would need to know about other factors that might cause this decreasing the number of shoppers in Plaza Center.
The third problem with this argument is that the Plaza Center might be located in a place that shoppers prefer going there with the skateboards, and the most shoppers of Plaza Center may be a skateboarding, and this prohibition leads the worst condition for shop owners. So, in addition, to improve the argument as a whole, it is greatly recommended to specify the percent of skateboarding shoppers of Plaza Center.
To recapitulate, despite the argument suffers from several problems and is unconvincing, but we cannot absolutely rely on it or refuse it without perusing any additional assumptions and reasoning. The author can strengthen his assertion by changing states referred to the mentioned solutions. Without these changes, the argument is implausible and the reasoning is faulty.
- Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the numbe 35
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 50
- Two years ago the city council voted to prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. They claimed that skateboard users were responsible for litter and vandalism that were keeping other visitors from coming to the plaza. In the past two years, however, there 12
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 393 350
No. of Characters: 1921 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.452 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.888 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.628 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.562 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.391 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.584 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 339, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended specifying'.
Suggestion: recommended specifying
... the argument as a whole, it is greatly recommended to specify the percent of skateboarding shoppers o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, third, thus, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1986.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 393.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0534351145 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76240500131 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488549618321 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.22255489022 284% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.7215980596 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.125 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5625 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190562827777 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060172371373 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799460796805 0.0701772020484 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100498696088 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572070120148 0.0628817314937 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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