"For the past five years, Mr. Charles Schade has been the music director at Steel City High School, and during that time the school band from Steel City High has won three regional band competitions. In addition, the quality of the music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments at Steel City High has improved markedly over the past five years. Because of such successes at Steel City High, the Saluda school board should hire Mr. Schade to plan and direct the general music education programs for the entire Saluda school system."
In this letter, a writer recommends that to success in regional band competitions, the Saluda school board should follow to hire Mr. Schade for planning and directing the general music education programs. To support this recommendation, the steel city high school adopted a similar plan for five years, and during that time this high school band has won three regional competitions. However, this recommendation cannot be accepted as it is in that it rests on some premises all of which can be challenged in one way or another.
The first problem with the argument is that the writer assumes that the steel city high school success because of Mr. Schade. However, there is no evidence to prove that this happen. For instance, maybe the government pays more attention to a cultural than before, so elucidating more budgets to high school for cultural activities such as music. Alternatively, perhaps students of steel city school are adroit in music, or they are played some music instrument before entering the high school, therefore leads to better results in competitions.
Another problem is that the writer assumes that the both of high school are identical in all aspects. Maybe the Saluda high school does not enough budgets to hire a new teacher for music education. Alternatively, perhaps ability and talent of students in the Saluda school are less than students of Steel City school, hence hiring Mr. Schade is not lead to better result.
The third problem is that the writer assumes that things remain same in all over years. Maybe students of Saluda school are more dexterity to take part in national competitions. Hence, Mr. Schade is not the able to preparation students for high-level competitions, so the Saluda school necessaries a teacher with a better resume. The argument has been shown an attempt of Mr. Schade only in the regional competition.
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...n be challenged in one way or another. The first problem with the argument is t...
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...ads to better results in competitions. Another problem is that the writer assum...
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...on students for high-level competitions, so the Saluda school necessaries a teach...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'hence', 'however', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'third', 'for instance', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.300884955752 0.25644967241 117% => OK
Verbs: 0.132743362832 0.15541462614 85% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0884955752212 0.0836205057962 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0530973451327 0.0520304965353 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00884955752212 0.0272364105082 32% => OK
Prepositions: 0.138643067847 0.125424944231 111% => OK
Participles: 0.0324483775811 0.0416121511921 78% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.72513047939 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0324483775811 0.026700313972 122% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.120943952802 0.113004496875 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00884955752212 0.0255425247493 35% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00294985250737 0.0127820249294 23% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1883.0 2731.13054187 69% => OK
No of words: 309.0 446.07635468 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.09385113269 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.57801047555 92% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.404530744337 0.378187486979 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.26213592233 0.287650121315 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.161812297735 0.208842608468 77% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0906148867314 0.135150697306 67% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72513047939 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 207.018472906 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478964401294 0.469332199767 102% => OK
Word variations: 47.4631037733 52.1807786196 91% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0714285714 23.2022227129 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4966358927 57.7814097925 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.5 141.986410481 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0714285714 23.2022227129 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.642857142857 0.724660767414 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 48.2850208044 51.9672348444 93% => OK
Elegance: 2.42424242424 1.8405768891 132% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.544808825235 0.441005458295 124% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.114017872294 0.135418324435 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0638021424083 0.0829849096947 77% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.553015958199 0.58762219726 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.107146210654 0.147661913831 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.245407595887 0.193483328276 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134939753304 0.0970749176394 139% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.527220784291 0.42659136922 124% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.068592255545 0.0774707102158 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.409035160484 0.312017818177 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224843849508 0.0698173142475 32% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 14.657635468 68% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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