In the argument presented here, the author seems to have covered a major portion about the investigation done on recalled pet food and claims that the food company need not investigate further because chemicals present are all approved and cannot be the cause for the symptoms. But on closer examination, one can find that the author has forgotten to consider various reasons and the evidence is insufficient.
The major factor that this investigation ignores is the time. The author claims that the company had tested the samples and has evaluated all the chemicals that were present in the recalled batches, does that mean that the batch of food items that caused the symptoms would show the same results? Assuming that the chemical found would be the same in both batches, this does not convey anything about the chemical composition and it is possible that the defective batches had a nonideal chemical composition.
One of the major features of packaged food is it's packaging itself. Many fried items are sold in large puffed packets that contain nitrogen gas to avoid microbial damage. There is a possibility that the packaging could have been damaged in the process of manufacturing or in transit. Since there is no mention of the level of human intervention in the process of manufacturing, an ill factory worker could have spread his illness and contaminated the batch. This could mean that the quality control process of the company is to be doubted and without clearly studying the quality control practices followed, the author cannot support his claim.
Assuming that the quality controls and the chemical composition remain unaltered, there is a chance that these pets could have had a reaction which could be caused by the food ingredients compounded by the surrounding weather. Without analyzing the medical reports of these pets, the author cannot vindicate the food company of blame.
In summary, the author has ignored various time-related factors and his conclusion is not satisfactory.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 327 350
No. of Characters: 1655 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.252 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.061 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.636 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.141 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.154 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.628 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 510, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es had a nonideal chemical composition. One of the major features of packaged fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so, as for, as to, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1692.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 327.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17431192661 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71131919279 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501529051988 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.4257382212 57.8364921388 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.153846154 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1538461538 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.61538461538 5.70786347227 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193504832566 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629270455283 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788124471824 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107398460724 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0778092304628 0.0628817314937 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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