Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument claims that Pirouettes Ballet School is the best option for any child, because, it of it's intensive training program and popular teachers who have danced for reputed ballet companies. Stated in this way argument fails to answer several questions which could have served in evaluating the correctness of the argument. The conclusion is also based on assumption for which there is no clear evidence. Therefore, argument is weak, incomplete and has several flaws.
First, argument readily assumes that training program in Pirouettes is better than rest of the schools in Elmtown. If, we could prove that training program of some other school is better than Piroutees then argument fails to stand its ground. One cannot deny that intensive programs are not always good and they stress out the students. Hence, without the information of how Pirouettes training is better than other schools we cannot say that it is the best training program.
Second, argument claims that teachers of Pirouettes school have danced for reputed ballet companies. Although, it could be true that they are good dancers and hence they have got opportunity to dance in prestigious companies, this cannot prove that rest of the teachers are not as worthy as these teachers. There could be teachers in some other school who are very good at dancing but they not interested in performing for companies. It could also be possible that person who is very good at dancing need not necessarily be a good teacher. In addition to this there is no mention of quality of teaching of rest of the schools. Without providing answers to these question, we cannot assume that Pirouettes school has best teachers.
Finally, argument says that many of the students of Pirouettes have gone on to become professional dancers with famous companies. Again argument fails to mention several key factors that are essential to evaluate the argument. There is no evidence that Pirouettes is the only schools to produce students who have gone on to top dance companies. Also, there is no mention of success of students. It could be possible that joining the big companies require financial support for students and Pirouettes students are comparatively richer than students of rest of the schools. Conclusion that Pirouettes schools is clear choice is purely based on the assumption that only Pirouettes school has the best training and the best teachers.
In summary, argument fails to consider above relevant facts which are essential for evaluating the argument. In order to assess the merits of a situation it is necessary to have the knowledge of all the relevant factors. Hence, argument is weak, flawed and is open to debate.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 442 350
No. of Characters: 2208 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.585 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.995 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.542 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 172 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.217 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.48 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.609 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.528 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...er than rest of the schools in Elmtown. If, we could prove that training program o...
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Line 5, column 713, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'has the best'.
Suggestion: has the best
...we cannot assume that Pirouettes school has best teachers. Finally, argument says tha...
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Line 7, column 264, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt. There is no evidence that Pirouettes is the only schools to produce students ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, second, so, then, therefore, in addition, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 13.6137724551 169% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2262.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 442.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11764705882 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62560825674 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.393665158371 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 678.6 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.4912351789 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.347826087 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2173913043 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91304347826 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327406827382 0.218282227539 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10104487366 0.0743258471296 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100708694313 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182540823127 0.128457276422 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0735513835691 0.0628817314937 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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